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risha17 posted this thread...
on Jun. 20 at 6:13 am

Hey everyone! This is the first time I am posting here, to be honest I'm pretty nervous. This is a free verse i wrote a while back, I'd really appreciate some reviews
The blue sea and dark sky
The waves and the stars
All glistening in the moonlight
The sound of the crashing waves
The twinkle of the midnight stars
Beaming down on me
I could feel the breeze all around
The hooting of the owl
The sound of the rustling of the leaves
I glance as a bat flys by
Lost in his own world

risha17, Indore, Other
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madsdaws BRONZE, Staten Island, New York
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madsdaws BRONZE replied...
on Jun. 29 at 3:53 pm
i love the imagery !

Voltaire-Writer567, San Diego, California
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Favorite Quote:
“I am but a merry wanderer of the night.”

on Jul. 18 at 5:52 pm

doveluciaaa, San Jose, California
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doveluciaaa replied...
on Jul. 29 at 8:50 pm
beautiful imagery! I would suggest adding some punctuation to build structure :)