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this one's called "the sickness of souls". i wrote it at 6 am after having a nightmare. it's my first time posting, so feedback is rlly appreciated!! :)

lemon-girl posted this thread...
on Jun. 27 at 3:39 pm

the sickness of souls

i know who you are.
you, who kept me alive all these years,
me, the blade so bent on destruction.
when you took me in, nursed me,
i never told you how sick i was, did i?
you saw the scars of my heart
but not the poison in my mind
and even as you sheltered me
against the demons, mine, roaring at your door,
i never told you
that the darkest wraiths did not howl
they waited
they crept in,
became weeds in the garden of my pain,
and i let them.

i was the illness,
and the truth is you should have feared me
the sick only sicken the healthy,
but the healthy do not cure the sick!
maybe if you’d known what you had to lose,
maybe if i’d told you,
maybe we wouldn’t be here

but i did not, and here i am
broken
and here you are
still trying to make me whole
i do not fear the poison anymore
it has claimed me,
and that, i know, is too late to change
but i fear for you.
i fear what you’ve become.
your hands were what kept me alive
but somewhere along the way,
i felt them grow cold
your eyes never strayed from mine
but somewhere along the way,
i saw them turn hollow
you only wanted to save my life
but somewhere along the way, i watched
as i killed your soul instead.



lemon-girl, Houston, Texas
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madsdaws BRONZE replied...
on Jun. 29 at 12:58 am
this is so good oh my god! I love the line "the sick only sicken the healthy, but the healthy do not cure the sick!" you have captured this feeling so perfectly it hurts. great job <3


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Awsmswim replied...
on Aug. 15 at 8:34 am
This is really good!!!!