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no title, but help pls i'll comment on your work <3

madsdaws BRONZE posted this thread...
on Jul. 19 at 10:26 am

they say that love is like a drug but i never knew
if they meant that tingling in the tips of your toes
that sends itself up the connections in your spine, intoxicating the sickly strings of your mind. that false promise of life giving way to its own end.

or the lavender swirls that fill your eyes as you turn to look at a
christmas tree that has been replaced by an angel, her wings
open wide, as if gravity would be so kind as to stop just for you for one moment.

maybe they meant the drugs that fill you with pastel convulsions and fire.
fire burning its way through your intestines scorching your
skin to ash, paralyzing not just your legs, but your lips your tongue your teeth
closed, as not to let even the shadow of a word slip through.

no, i don’t know much about drugs, or even love for that.
i know that what they gave me doesn’t feel like the
fiery passion that love has told me it would be, rather
i am a city deserted, a lone light that remains lit on the open sign at a cafe
just the “o,” hollow in the center, but open, unseamed right down the middle.

i have also never been in love, but i know
that when i talk to you, a few more lights go on. i am stitched back up,
at least down my spine by the sensation of your skin pressed against mine.

i do not demand that you fix what is broken, by God
you would be here for a second eternity,
but whoever said that love was a drug could not have touched
something atypical to their lips
and could never have known (of) you.



madsdaws BRONZE, Staten Island, New York
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madsdaws BRONZE, Staten Island, New York
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madsdaws BRONZE replied...
on Jul. 19 at 10:27 am
wait lol its called "i don't need you to be able," i'm just dumb


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Awsmswim replied...
on Aug. 14 at 12:22 pm
@madsdaws you're a genius this is amazing I never knew poetry could be this good!


madsdaws BRONZE, Staten Island, New York
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madsdaws BRONZE replied...
on Aug. 19 at 11:45 am
that is so kind, thank you so much <3