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The Amazing Salamanders

September 22, 2009
By Anonymous

Once there were three salamanders, but they weren’t like any ordinary salamanders. There names were Ron, Peter and Tom. Ron played many sports and was always voted ‘Most Valuable Player’ (MVP). Peter is like Spiderman but instead of using a web, he uses vines, leaves, and twigs to swing from place to place. Tom is like both Ron and Peter but he is the smartest salamander in the rain forest. Together they use their talents to combat evil. They are known as the ‘Amazing Salamanders.’

It was quiet, too quiet. Suddenly a flock of birds began flying out of the trees, one after another. A snake was slithering up along a branch, Ron reacted quickly. He grabbed a bunch of leaves and twigs and formed a ball and a lacrosse stick. He tried throwing the ball at the snake but it clung tightly to the branch. Peter had an idea, “Ron, toss me the lacrosse stick.” Load some twigs in the net of your stick. Peter tossed over thirty twigs, he hit the snake and it made him furious. Tom said, “Might I suggest something? Quick, get a vine and tie that ball to the end of it. Hold the vine and swing the ball to knock the snake of the branch.” “It worked!” Ron said loudly. “Well, it almost worked.” When the snake fell off the branch, he slithered away. But then, he came back with more than twenty-five other snakes! The next thing the salamanders knew, they were tied around the tree. “Way to go Einstein” said Ron and Peter. “Sorry guys, I didn’t think they were that strong” said Tom. “Peter, can you give me the sharpest vine you have” said Ron. “What for?” asked Peter. “You’ll see” whispered Ron. “Now I get it, your going to make a razor to cut though the vines” said Peter. “If you’re going to do that, take my super utility belt” said Peter. “You read my mind” said Ron. Tom asked, “How long will it take?” Ron replied, “Oh about five more minutes.” In no time at all, they were free. “Now what are we going to do?” asked Tom and Peter. “We are going to sneak around this tree and run to the 14th tree to the north side of the forest” said Ron. “On my signal, we will go around the tree.” “What is the signal?” asked Tom. “I will just wave my hand.” “Ready, set, go!” whispered Ron. “What happened to waving your hand?” said Peter. “I don’t know, I just wanted to say Ready, Set, Go!” said Ron.
When they arrived at the 14th tree, they saw five hungry owls. “Oh No!”
“Here we go again!” said Peter.

Stay Tuned for the next adventure of the Amazing Salamanders.

The author's comments:
A middle school piece i thought was good then wanted to see what the world thought about it

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on Nov. 29 2011 at 3:57 pm
abedengo-called-benny BRONZE, Valley View, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
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Pretty odd; but I love it.. Keep writing!

on Oct. 5 2010 at 8:40 pm
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
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today's top voted are such random i like this. A lot. But it would be easier to read if the dialogue was put into different paragraphs....just a formatting issue.

mcbridet said...
on Oct. 22 2009 at 6:15 pm
I really liked this piece. First, you incorporated a lot of personification like how the salamanders talked and how they played sports. Next, I liked how you made the salamanders use their abilities to get past the snakes. Another thing I liked about this piece is how you put some humor in it when Peter says, "Here we go again". Overall, I liked this piece.

sherbinej said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 9:11 am
I really liked this story because you have ordinary salamanders doing extraordinary things. Also I liked when you said "Ron played many sports and was always voted most valuable player, because it shows what they do when their not fighting crime. I also thought that it was cool that you gave them well-known super powers. Maybe you could use a little more details next time. Hope to read more though.

Hockey44 said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 6:20 pm
Hockey44, Wilmington, Delaware
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Hey guys Writer of This article and wanted o let you all know there is another/ better story involving Ron,Peter,and Tom tonight!!!!!

drago said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 2:10 pm
this was a great story, cant wait for more

Nightwing 21 said...
on Sep. 30 2009 at 2:06 pm
I think that you were very repetitive and it was kind of hard to follow. I would work on finding other ways to show who is saying what instead of , he said he said he said. other than that, it was ok

on Sep. 29 2009 at 9:07 pm
RandallRunninMan BRONZE, Littleton, Colorado
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I'm part of Karls group and I personally liked it I can't wait for more about the amazing salamanders.

Shanaynay said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 1:22 pm
We thought your story was ok it was confusing who was talking also where do they get all the things they have :-)

cbandca said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 11:51 am
It was a good idea but we thought that when the salamanders got caught the story could've used more detail.

karls group said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 9:28 am
I enjoyed your story and it could use more details.