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She's Dead to Me {Chp 1}

September 13, 2009
By PeaceGirl11 BRONZE, Toltec, Arizona
PeaceGirl11 BRONZE, Toltec, Arizona
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Chapter One

I woke up in a white room, on a white uncomfortable white bed... alone. "Hello?" I asked out, hoping I wasn't alone. "Hello McKenzie." A woman's voice answered back. "Who's there?" I asked scaredly. A woman with curly dark brown hair walked into the room wearing a very pretty white dress. What was with all this white stuff? "I am Elana, I am here to help you cross over." Elana said. "Wha-what do you mean," I gulped. "Cross over?" I picked up my hands to move my bea-utiful blond hair out of my face. It was still curled, why? My hair was naturally straight. I looked down at my outfit, I was still wearing my green tank top and my super cute pink skirt that looked just perfect with the tank. It was the outfit I'd worn on my first date with Brian. All I remember was that we were in his car searching for a parking space in the lot for the movie theatre. He held the steering wheel and looked at me with his mezmerizing green eyes that sparkled. "You look beautiful McKenzie," He said lovingly. I blushed, I've been on plenty of dates before but well this one felt special. "I'll always love you no matter if my dad makes me move again to San Diego I won't have any other girlfriends. I'll remember you, because I love you." He said, his voice hipnotizing me. I opened my mouth to speak but he shushed me with a kiss. All of a sudden he pulled away. "McKenzie! Look out!" I turned my head a blue van was coming right at us from my side. That was all I remember. "Why am I here? I don't wanna be dead! I'm not even dead! I mean come on!" I screamed at Elana. Her face was still smiling."But you are dead, and you need yo be here to cross over," She spoke than stopped. "Unless you have some unfinished business?" She asked calmly. I jumped off the bed at her. "Yes! I have a lot of unfinished business to do! A ton! I made a whole list when I was 7." I yelled excitedly. "Well than you must be off." I began walking off into the white world. "Hey um, before I leave like what happened to Brian? That night that it happened?" I asked Elana sadly. "Ah, your companion." She said sweetly. "Uh yeah, my boyfriend." She continued, not listening to what I said. "When the van hit the car it hit your side harder. He just got a few fractured bones and well you came here." I sighed as I heared that Brian was okay. "Well, alrighty than I must be off. Sooo yup, BYE!" I walked away in the white room picturing where I wanted to go. "I'll remember you, because I love you." Brian's words echoed throughout my head. He was out there alive, waiting for me, knowing I was somewhere loving him back.

The author's comments:
Well, if any of you have watched Gost Whisperer show she like talks to ghost. And well I thought of writing a story about a Ghost Girl named McKenzie who comes back for her "unfinished business" which is to find her boyfriend and tell him she still loves him. But when she finds out he has another girlfriend let's just say McKenzie has only one thing on her mind, "She's Dead to Me". Hope you like it!!

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This article has 4 comments.

on Apr. 14 2016 at 10:55 am
crazypandagirl BRONZE, Jeffersonton, Virginia
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It is absolutely beautiful, I hope to see the next chapter soon!

on Nov. 3 2009 at 5:11 pm
I agree. But great job otherwise! I guess this is why we have editors...Hey, no one's perfect.

on Nov. 3 2009 at 8:55 am
iDaReToDrEaM13 SILVER, Sharon Springs, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"By three methods we may learn wisdom: First, by reflection, which is noblest; Second, by imitation, which is easiest; and third by experience, which is the bitterest."

Uhmm... nice plot. i really like this story and the point your trying to get across. Next time, check your spelling... and dont use so much repetition. But otherwise.... decent job.

on Oct. 23 2009 at 3:48 pm
kennedy_rowzz SILVER, Sterling Heights, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"we can never truly know who we are"-afi

I really liked this it is very well written,