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Live, Love, Lose (Rejected)

August 26, 2009
By greg9381 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
greg9381 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
12 articles 1 photo 50 comments

This poem is NOT about suicide or violence. That’s what it might seem like, but trust me, it’s not. It’s about the pain of losing someone who was never there.

It hurts,
Somewhere deep inside.
It’s a pain from which,
I cannot hide.

It numbs my feet and burns my eyes,
What a surprise: onlookers surmise that
I am weak for the tears on my face.

I carry the mark of a broken soul:
An X on my wrist,
Blood on my fist,
And a heart as black as coal.

I carry the mark of a broken heart,
An X on my chest,
Same as the rest,
And my mind’s about to depart.

This fiery pillar of flame,
This eternal inferno of sorrow,
Sweeps all over searching.
For one.
For me.
Thumbing through all of mankind,
From one world to the next it dashes,
But some day all that pillar shall find,
Is the remnants of my ashes.

The fire is all consuming.
Nothing stands a chance.
It enchants you, and,
In one fell swoop,
It scatters all your hopes and dreams,
Rips them apart at the seams.
Tearing aspirations to threads,
Like ripping bodies from the heads.
Like some experiment gone wrong,
A twisted bird with a painful song,
A wolf in sheep’s clothing.
The fire looms above me now,
The crackling fills my ears.
I think I must be leaving now,
My eyes are filled with tears.

I might come back another day,
But for now I must depart.
But this pain shall never fade away,
Till the day it tears me apart.

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nutmeg212 GOLD said...
on Aug. 28 2010 at 8:18 pm
nutmeg212 GOLD, Coventry, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't worry about it." -V.Z.

You were able to do something in this writing (and many if your other pieces) that not all writers can but strive to do: you make the reader feel.  As i read this i felt the pain, the emothin and the story underlying as it was written.  This is amazing and beautiful and made my heart squeeze and tears threaten to fall as i felt the emense emotion.  great job and keep writing

on Nov. 29 2009 at 9:52 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
54 articles 2 photos 748 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

this is so good i think i just might cry becuase of how beautiful it is. great work!

on Nov. 25 2009 at 6:45 pm
ResistMe PLATINUM, New Tazewell, Tennessee
44 articles 0 photos 25 comments
Wow,I love this.

So interesting,it just flows so well.

I love your word choice.

This is very nice.

Nice work.

on Nov. 16 2009 at 5:48 pm
twilighter_360 GOLD, NYOB, New Jersey
12 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A bird dosen't sing because it has an answer.A bird sings because it has a song." -- Maya Angelou

"Give peace a chance." --John Lennon

wowza! this is bee-yoo-tee-full!!!

on Oct. 30 2009 at 9:23 am
lost_in_myself, Brookfield, Missouri
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I love this. You are an amazing writer. I like how it just flows naturally. Keep it up.

rAyLyNn said...
on Sep. 5 2009 at 12:08 pm
I totally understand this!!!!!!!