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The Promise to End All Promises

August 27, 2009
By XRamirez SILVER, Round Rock, Texas
XRamirez SILVER, Round Rock, Texas
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An energy quaking in the depths of my soul
So strong, profound, and out of control.
It hungers for something more.
Ravishing my life and all it could store.

My spirit is now pressed thin
Fighting a battle against the conquest of sin
Shaking and trembling beneath the strength
It loses it's hold and begins to quake.

My soul latches on with every ounce of hope
Physically my body begins to stroke.
Light darkens all around me.
A ray of light is all I see.
Leading somewhere I wish I could reach
I've fallen so far beneath the breach

Lifted up towards the heavens then jerked down
I see my body from below the ground.
Fire encases my spirit.
My soul screams out and becomes weary.

In hell my spirit has landed.
An eternity of pain is what has been demanded.
Other souls toil on into the searing heat.
They've lost their hope and are only weak.

Nostalgia envelopes my soul
Remembering everything I've done so cold.
Wishing to rewind I pray for a chance
to make things right and be a true man.

At that instant wings erupt from my back.
I rise above the infernos wrath.
Towards my body I rise fast.
In a second this will all be past.

I shed my wings and drop flight.
My spirit in my body locked tight.
Darkness disperses and light prevails.
Now I must upheld
The promise I made in Hell.

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This article has 6 comments.

on Sep. 11 2009 at 11:22 am
HeavenCooley GOLD, Stillwater, Oklahoma
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best poem got the talent of a journalist in that hand of yours, keep strong and keep writing in helps in the long run. your really good!!!:)

on Sep. 9 2009 at 9:07 pm
choirchic101 SILVER, Norwalk, California
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Favorite Quote:
in order for God to use all of you you have to be completely broken

best poem i've read in a long time. you have the gift of a poet. new fave. keep on writing

on Sep. 9 2009 at 7:17 pm
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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wow this is a beautiful poem i think its my new fave :) CONGRATS!



p.s. cmnt on my poems... please+much thanks for writing this!

ErykaLeigh said...
on Sep. 9 2009 at 9:18 am
I'm a teenage writer and i'm sitting here in class (finished with my work of coarse) when I happen upon this poem. I literally sat straight up with a jolt when I read this. It was amazing!!! Your writing is the best i've seen in a very long while. You truly know what it means to be a poet. Well done!

on Sep. 9 2009 at 8:06 am
lemons_r_crazy BRONZE, Holdenville, Oklahoma
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Love it!! This is by FAR the best poem I've read on here. Favorite! Five stars! Keep writing...

on Sep. 7 2009 at 8:13 pm
MeghanMichelle GOLD, Hooksett, New Hampshire
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Amazing poem. Best Ive read in awhile =]