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Breaking Reality / Writing

April 5, 2014
By idkmanguy GOLD, Ballwin, Missouri
idkmanguy GOLD, Ballwin, Missouri
16 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It was the patient, cut-flower sound of a man waiting to die." - Patrick Rothfuss

Come on, give me a break. From what, you ask? Well, for starters, from reality! That means a break from earth, a break from the sun and stars and moon, a break from humanity, a break from machines and trees and the sea and sky. Yes, even a break from you. Don't get it? well then forget it. Just gimme a pencil and some paper; I'll make that break myself. Now, bye... I shall write myself a story / where upon the midnight hour / down upon me stars do shower / and as I dance in rain of glory / learn I will a brand new story / while terrifying gets the tale / the rain of glory turns to hail / and when it is gone, the break / back to reality i come and make / myself another story.

The author's comments:
This was a quick, three - four minute piece, that I wrote mostly at random; However, the song "Bohemian Rhapsody" (Is this the real life, is this just fantasy, caught in a landslide, no escape from reality... ect. ect.)(By Queen) and i decided to write something about reality. Also, i wanted to try out the poetry style where you use the slashes ( / ).

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on Apr. 19 2014 at 12:23 am
jacey_poo BRONZE, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
never judge a book by its cover

Even though it was a three min thing it came together perfectly

Nobuo GOLD said...
on Apr. 11 2014 at 5:13 pm
Nobuo GOLD, Dio, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:

you seem to focus on breaking, reality, and nature a lot.  For those hash marks, instead just make them another line.  And try not to always rhyme, it will add a different effect to your writing.  You're terrific at rhyming, but you should definitely try not doing it once

on Apr. 11 2014 at 4:45 pm
SlowEternity BRONZE, Big Lake, Minnesota
4 articles 15 photos 79 comments

Favorite Quote:
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Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Apr. 11 2014 at 4:43 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

I really, really like this! Your imagery is fantastic; simply beautiful, and the whole concept is wonderful and relatable. Your voice is very unique as well within your writing, as if you're actually speaking to the reader. You have an amazing talent! Please write more like this :)