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She Has a Story to Tell

February 5, 2009
By foreverdreaming14 PLATINUM, Redmond, Washington
foreverdreaming14 PLATINUM, Redmond, Washington
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She has an intense look about her,
Worry lines etched into the fabric of her face,
Crow's feet lining the corners of her eyes,
Lips tight against her face like a lemon sucked down to the rind,
Her eyes are a cloudy blue,
Like her vision,
Fading at the edges,
All the colors blurred together,
On some it may have looked like,
w e a k n e s s,
But on her it looks like,
s t r e n g t h.
Like she saw what she saw,
And doesn't need to see anymore,
And with my 20/20 vision,
And life ahead of me,
Well, I could never compare,
And she leans forward,
Her joints creaking like her old rocking chair,
Sipping tea,
The floral scent curling in her stomach,
Biting on her tongue in a way that satisfies,
She leans back up,
Moisture beading on the wispy hairs on her lip,
She beckons me over,
Arthritic hand lumpy and deformed,
I settle into my favorite seat,
The one with the threadbare cushion,
And the,
Legs that always wobble when I laugh,
At the words that flow out of her mouth,
Wavering and old,
But convinced of their own truth,
She may be old,
But she has a story to tell.

The author's comments:
Hi, my name is Sydney and I am thirteen years old. I have been writing for as long as I can remember and really like poetry. Please comment on my article and give me constructive critisism on how to make my writing better.

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Zoe_T PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 9 2009 at 9:22 am
Zoe_T PLATINUM, New City, New York
38 articles 1 photo 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened." -Dr. Seuss

I really like your poem. I think it has a good story behind it and good form. One thing you could work on though is making it clearer to the reader when you jump back and fourth between "she" and "me." Great job, and keep writing!