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My Garden

March 8, 2009
By TayMar GOLD, Copley, Ohio
TayMar GOLD, Copley, Ohio
11 articles 5 photos 18 comments

You were my very own Eden,
I thought you were sent by God to accompany me through this short journey of life.
You were paradise- you came with every necessity I would ever require.
But then it came the forbidden fruit that showed itself-
Deeper inside the forest of you.
I thought I wouldn't be tempted,
By the utopian part of you - the only side I cared to see.
But then came your tempting fruit,
That I refused to touch,
But you gave me an offer I couldn't refuse.
A nibble here and there turned to everywhere
I got sick-
Of you,
Of this evil side of you that only made me feel worse once I had gotten my share.
I tried to spit you up but the damage was done.
Your secret was revealed to me and I shouldn't have known
I knew too much and couldn't stay
Your fruit gave me new knowledge,
But I lost my old.
Your fruit gave me bravery,
But I lost my discretion.
Your fruit gave me a glimpse of my future,
But I lost my past'
My past,
Your past,
Our past.
In you- my very own Eden.

The author's comments:
When I was younger, my really strict parents would always tell me to not talk back to them but to instead write my thoughts down in a journal- so I did- even though I'm pretty sure they read my journals anyways. So that's how I started writing. To make sure my brother wasn't reading it I would always have metaphorical poetry like this that could stand for so many things in my life- and he never knew! This poem was written during Christmas Break (2008) after I was having a really hard time sleeping because I was so upset this is my first time reading it too because I always feel embararassed reading my poetry!Well I won't ramble on and on..
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iWrite2 SILVER said...
on Mar. 31 2009 at 8:47 pm
iWrite2 SILVER, Jackson, Tennessee
8 articles 0 photos 7 comments

I must truly say that I've never read a poem written with such passion. I love the continued allusion to Adam and Eve, and the Garden of Eden. It fits perfectly into the mood you're trying to portray.Love it =]