Hatred | Teen Ink


April 26, 2010
By ktbug96 SILVER, Jericho, New York
ktbug96 SILVER, Jericho, New York
5 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
~Make a wish, it's up to you, find the strength inside, and watch your dreams come true, you don't need a shooting star, the magic's right there in your heart, close your eyes, believe, and make a wish~ (yes it's from a song :D)

The Snake came up
And bit me
I did not know why
But it did

Its teeth in me
Wouldn't stop attacking
And the venom
Ran through my blood

The venom ignited fire
That boiled rage
And the rage did nothing
I grew helpless

Until Hatred took over
It killed my heart
It killed my soul
It killed the snake

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on Jun. 1 2012 at 4:34 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

wonderfully crafted.... marvelous.... kinda creepy.... my favorite part is the ending....

pS. will u please check out my work? id love some feedback


XxBVBGRLxX said...
on May. 19 2010 at 10:55 pm
XxBVBGRLxX, Edwardsville, Illinois
0 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"I won\'t believe this lie. I know there\'s something more inside. When darkness is all you see, this is our Sweet Blasphemy.\" -A6

This is a great poem. I love the ending - It killed my heart. It killed my soul. It killed the snake. Beautiful ending!!

Shabria SILVER said...
on May. 19 2010 at 3:58 pm
Shabria SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
5 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be yourself" Quote by Miguel Jontel
"Don't be a talker, be a doer" Quote by Ms. Tanequa
"Enjoy Life" Quote by Akil
"Do what you love"

This peom is wonderful!!! Keep writting poetry. I would love to read more of them.


on May. 19 2010 at 3:07 pm
margierose GOLD, New York, New York
11 articles 5 photos 24 comments
Wow that's amazing!!! Keep writing you have real talent. Would you mind reading mine? 

inspir3d GOLD said...
on May. 19 2010 at 12:35 pm
inspir3d GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
11 articles 2 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
We're all just looking for attention, to be discovered overnight. We're all frustrated by the popular ones that claim the limelight before they fall to pieces. So many of us are stuck under the radar--what makes me different? You decide!

wow. this is incredible!!! rare talent right here :)

dianaforfree said...
on May. 19 2010 at 10:55 am
goodness! this is pure wonder. i love i love love. i love the words and the way you use them. i love the image, so very deep. wondrous.

on May. 19 2010 at 10:42 am
bkcrider92 GOLD, Roslyn Harbor, New York
10 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
“When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace.”

I really like this! If you can please check out my poem Memories and let me no wat you think and rate it =)

on May. 18 2010 at 7:52 pm
Sweatheart SILVER, BPT, Connecticut
5 articles 0 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
I can do anything

i really enjoyed this poem i liked how you showed that hatred is such a strong emotion 5 star

paranormaluv said...
on May. 18 2010 at 4:23 pm

Haha imagine if the snake and the speaker represented two people, like person A and person B. Then it would be like, person A did something bad to person B and wouldn't stop, so person B started to develop that rage and hate. 

I love this poem, it could be interpreted so many different ways!

Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 18 2010 at 3:30 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

i love the ending.

on May. 18 2010 at 1:22 pm
macfire82 BRONZE, Fort Bragg, North Carolina
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"what life can do is a miracle learn to hold on to it"

wow awesome really litral means. so much to me and true good job.

Safeleo said...
on May. 18 2010 at 1:49 am
Safeleo, Iwakuni, Other
0 articles 0 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Looking up into the night sky is like looking into infinity - the distance is incomprehensible and therefore meaningless."
-Douglas Adams

I like snakes! But other than that, really good poem.

Ale_18 BRONZE said...
on May. 17 2010 at 11:10 am
Ale_18 BRONZE, Monte Vista, Colorado
3 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
A dying man needs to die, as a sleepy man needs to sleep, and there comes a time when it is wrong, as well as useless, to resist.

This is really good :D good job!! lol u should check my stuff out

on May. 17 2010 at 7:33 am
brianababy BRONZE, South Plainfield, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"While your talking about me behinde my back.. you can kiss my a**"

I like this alot, it really shows your emotion toward the snake.

on May. 16 2010 at 8:34 pm
Patience97 PLATINUM, New Tripoli, Pennsylvania
27 articles 8 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People believe that if we really want to eliminate something, focus on that. How much sense does it make for us to give the particular problem all of the energy, as opposed to focusing on trust, love, living in abundance, education, or peace? -Un.

I love this. It shows how the snake attacked aimlessley. To kill, rather to kill one. It wasn't aiming for anyone in particular, just someone... great poem. Truthful.

on May. 16 2010 at 1:34 pm
mariahLynn SILVER, Craig, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 11 comments
this is really good. you should cheack out some of my work

on May. 16 2010 at 11:49 am
hollyhottell DIAMOND, Redding, California
54 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
poetry is a diary written out loud

hey this is good... normally i only like poetry that rymes in a certain way... but i liked this poem. good job... check out my work