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Foot From Death

July 2, 2011
By Saysh PLATINUM, Brentwood, California
Saysh PLATINUM, Brentwood, California
31 articles 1 photo 79 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

A foot from death
An edge that comes to a halting stop
My feet take one step closer
While I stare to the sands below

It is that sand
Not the fall
Not the wind rushing past me
But the sand that could kill

Small, grainy pieces of memories
Memories I can no longer face
Faces I can no longer place
And this spot

This spot
This secret overworld of lovely views
That leads me to be
One foot from death

I take a deep breath
Then a step forward just to feel the rush
Then I back away
Back into the weird collections of the past and future
The collection we call life

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This article has 6 comments.

on Aug. 31 2011 at 11:24 am
ZephyrVon-ZombieOverlord BRONZE, Cartersville, Virginia
4 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
The knack of flying is learning how to throw yourself at the ground and miss. -Douglas Adams

I find the symbolism here quite remarkable... Keep up the good work.

Steph0804 GOLD said...
on Aug. 31 2011 at 9:43 am
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
12 articles 4 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Explaining a joke is like dissecting a frog: you understand it better, but the frog dies in the process." -E.B. White

I love it! I love the descriptions, the comparison of sand to the people and things in life... I was so afraid she'd fall, but she stepped back again. I loved it! Loved it loved it loved it!

Megan.J.B said...
on Aug. 27 2011 at 10:00 pm
Megan.J.B, Sault Ste Marie, Other
0 articles 0 photos 185 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Here's the real truth. There are eight million people in this city. And those teeming masses exist for the sole purpose of lifting the few exceptional people onto their shoulders. You, me? We're exceptional."
- Green Goblin. :)

This poem is awesome! I liked the voice and style here; really original. I think the flow could have been a little better, maybe swapping some words around. Really good piece. :)

on Aug. 9 2011 at 10:04 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 577 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Wow. Your style is so unique and your word choice very well done. I love this! :)

on Jul. 31 2011 at 2:08 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

This is great!  I love the imagery in this poem. :)

tealbird said...
on Jul. 31 2011 at 10:18 am
You have a really good way with words. The poem is really good.