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Till the day I die

September 2, 2011
By CrystalMarie GOLD, Steubenville, Ohio
CrystalMarie GOLD, Steubenville, Ohio
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Till the day I die
on this stary night.
Far away from the world,
When you feel sad,
Look up at the sky, And remember I'll alaways be there for you

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on Oct. 14 2011 at 1:03 pm
TheGirlWhoDancesWithSnowflakes SILVER, Sunnyvale, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Duct tape is like the force. It has a light side, a dark side, and it holds the world together."

Friendship is born at that moment when one person says to another,
"What! You too? I thought I was the only one."
- C. S. Lewis

I agree with Emiri. I was confused at the beginning when it said "Til the day I die on this starry night." It makes it sound like you will be dying now. The poem is also really short and undescriptive. Other than that, it's ok.

BluBliss GOLD said...
on Oct. 14 2011 at 12:24 pm
BluBliss GOLD, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Bella's love for Edward was like, "Omg. He's hot. He's mine because he sparkles. Now I'll brood the wholle book while I'm with him."

I like the meanine. Just.... the first part was a little....Till the day I die on this stary night. It kind of makes it sound like you're dying that night. Or, whoever it is. And I don't think the emphasise on the last line in necessary. Other than that, nice!