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A Child's Choice

April 12, 2012
By snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

My child, locked in a brick house is praying.
Her humble wish of nothing cause
Tears of stone to fall from those bloodshot eyes of his
As he soon examines the lock on the door.
He lets out a roguish chortle, crooking his lips upward
As he realizes they are made of diamond
Thus, no one can enter.
His creator claims it to be
Simply a phase of growth.
Of course, she is blind
Blind to the frightening truth,
Existing only within the spirals of her womb.
Suddenly, a friend’s ecstatic yell emerges
from the outer boundaries of an unwelcome abyss,
Forcing my child’s ears to contract,
And then disappear.
The friend again scowls from the other side
As an endeavor to awaken curiosity
In the murderous heart of a reluctant entity
Whose warmth for society has deteriorated.
My child grows pallid wings
On his strained back.
Yet, he remains within the house of brick,
With his wings pointed to the horizon.
He desires to escape
And prays to remain still,
Absolutely still.
Enmity has secluded my child from the other boy
Who oddly enough,
has grown horns of crimson since I saw him last.
Whose voice has transformed into a raspy croak
threatening mankind,
Where as my child has in fact become a goddess,
A goddess of gray who stays in her brick house all day long,
Praying for the humble wish of nothing.

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This article has 4 comments.

on May. 25 2012 at 3:50 pm
Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
16 articles 16 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all." - Emily Dickinson

I really enjoyed the metaphors and imagery. The storyline seems like something I would like, however, I got lost trying to identify the different characters.

Taconut7 GOLD said...
on Apr. 15 2012 at 9:39 pm
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me

"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid." - Albert Einstein

I had a little trouble following the story, but I will give you the benefit of the doubt and rate it high

on Apr. 15 2012 at 10:20 am
maizyiscrazy GOLD, Washington, District Of Columbia
10 articles 53 photos 261 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe in pink. I believe that laughing is the best calorie burner. I believe in kissing, kissing a lot. I believe in being strong when everything seems to be going wrong. I believe in miracles. ~Audrey Hepburn

Wow, this was painful and absolutely real. Your metaphors are superb... I just love everything! :) Five stars!

on Apr. 14 2012 at 9:40 pm
gb12197 PLATINUM, Bridgeport, Pennsylvania
20 articles 3 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"next time you feel like a failure, think about how you are alive, and you have the opportunity to be successful."

"i don't have an attitude, i have a personality you can't handle"

"i am weird"

this poem is so unique. you use really great imagery, i felt like i was right there in the poem. i like how it didn't dull out torward the end, and it was interesting the whole time. great job :)