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Sweet Surrender

September 12, 2012
By dya.o PLATINUM, Milton, Florida
dya.o PLATINUM, Milton, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
“If consensus is overrated, I think balance is, too.
I have no interest in living a balanced life.
I want a life of adventure.” | Chris Guillebeau

Oh how does such sweet surrender
entangle me in its grip?
To where I will look into your eyes
and slowly drown in an ocean of ecstasy.
As I am drawn away from your eyes
I feel my gaze move towards your smile
and I am once again lost.

My heart leaps from my chest
and nestles comfortably in your fingertips.

I stare longingly at your smile
and know my lips are curling upwards automatically.

I see our smiles dancing from lip to lip,
and I am amazed,
at how quickly my heart beat picks up speed,
and how the blood pumps in my ears
So that this pink blooms upon my cheeks
to where joy burns down deep inside of me.

I sense his gaze
and I am overcome with love.

I love the way he laughs,
and how it gives me a sense of home.
I hear his chuckle and I giggle,
For he has made himself laugh as well.
He speaks in a voice meant for my ears alone,
and I fall in love again
as he makes me smile with happiness abroad.

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on Feb. 13 2013 at 10:53 am
SteelersJdog GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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This is so sweet! I love how much passion you put into your writing, I can feel the energy in your words. Nothing better than writing that comes from the heart! The imagery in this is vivid, and the expression of emotion is beautiful. Very nice!

XweienX said...
on Jan. 16 2013 at 6:27 pm
XweienX, Shah Alam, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Be inspired to be an inspiration.

In my opinion, the first stanza has the most power in it, this makes the rest of the poem seem like it's losing its power. A friendly suggestion is to put the most powerful lines at the bottom of the poem and have your readers build towards it.

But still, great poem! Keep up the great work!