exodus | Teen Ink


February 23, 2013
By still.alive BRONZE, Ridge, New York
still.alive BRONZE, Ridge, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Will I be something?
Am I something?
And the answer comes:
You already are
You always were
And you still have time to be"
-Anis Mojgani

as you force a still smoking candle down the neck of your birthday bottle
i know you didn't wish me

your 18th spelled out the Bible of your freedom in the language of midnight kisses
our only religion
and your Genesis was our Revelation
this Exodus is not freeing
it is a bloody tourniquet made with premature heartstrings that are old enough to know that they are breaking

is it my fault my pen still moves for you?
when we explored together my two greatest cracks
the stitches that came apart the nights we loved
and the open wound from which i pour poetry

is there a difference?
are they not twin ladders to God?
are you not, dressed in nothing but the secret-keeping night and silksmooth whispered goodbyes
wanting one last time
are you not my only salvation?

we did the perfect amputation
body from soul
mind from spirit
split so deep i am invisible to everyone who is not made of omnipotence
you are my only Messiah, are you not?

there is a girl you made woman who lies beneath white linen bedsheets in October
she lies like flame
like free and feared and f***ed up
like forever far from her Messiah
like frustration falling with her face in your hands
she lies like a cold fireplace
she lies like fire itself

and as you suffocate her in the stuffy showering of still smoking kisses
she knows
you didn't wish her

and she hopes that when you're running from her
laying still like time in your college lover's bedsheets
sweet wish cherries already popped
you know that she cried

and prayed

and wished

for you

The author's comments:
This piece was hard for me to write. The emotions behind this are indescribable.

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on May. 30 2014 at 12:01 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Really powerful, expressive and interesting, but in places I couldn't fully understand what you were saying and I think you were trying to cram too much in. Also, it annoys me that you don't use capital letters. Other than that, I really like this :) sorry if I sound mean

on May. 20 2014 at 9:25 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

This is a really powerful poem, with lots of emotion behind it.  I could feel the sadness. 5 stars 

freeday15 GOLD said...
on May. 20 2014 at 4:40 pm
freeday15 GOLD, Paramus, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is Blind" i truly believe in this it is in all of my pieces, and if u read between the lines then u will find it there...

WOW. I dont know what else to say... that was very powerful. You are very powerful with words. Something my teacher once told me: "I teach english because I want to teach you the ways of language. Words are not just for getting good grades, but they are for expressing something so undescribable, something larger than the picture. there are so many wonderful things to do with words and I want to share that with you. To teach you the power of your words." You just did what my teacher has been talking about, and wow, that was amazing.