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If I Should Die

August 27, 2013
By SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I hope the Ashes fall
back to where they belong
in the Ground, growing Flowers--
maybe Roses,
maybe not.
But they will fall,
unless you stop them,
and things will grow--
Hope, Love, maybe Joy--
eventually will grow
if you let them.

The author's comments:
Based on the child's prayer that goes like this:
"Now I lay me
Down to sleep,
I pray thee Lord my soul to keep.
If I should die before I wake,
I pray thee Lord my soul to take."

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on May. 2 2015 at 9:57 pm
theheavymetalist ELITE, Winter Haven, Florida
247 articles 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
Take me As I Am - James Labrie of Dream Theater

From a prayer to the inspiration of your poem here. It goes to show that art may show no boundaries. Similar to Mufasa`s nature speech with Simba in the Lion King. We are all connected in some way, even to the plants.

OldYoungOne said...
on Oct. 11 2013 at 3:05 pm
I was good fro what it is. I like hwo you derived inspiration from sucha simple prayer and made it something else. I love the topic although I wish that there was a better flow to this work.

on Sep. 24 2013 at 7:17 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Nice job, the message is brilliant and the formatting is spot on. I also like your inspiration. Keep rockin Rayyn!

on Sep. 17 2013 at 10:43 pm
CrazySissi GOLD, Newman Lake, Washington
19 articles 10 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
My only love sprung from my only hate. Too early seen unknown and known too late.

I like this poem a lot. I think it shows that even if someone you love dies you can still move on. Keep up th egood work.

on Sep. 15 2013 at 1:45 pm
Carly_Elizabeth PLATINUM, Othello, Washington
39 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And above all, watch with glittering eyes the whole world around you because the greatest secrets are always hidden in the most unlikely places. Those who don't believe in magic will never find it."
Roald Dahl

This is great. I love the idea of still being of use to the world after you die. At least that's what I got from this poem. The only thing I would say is just to put more feeling in it. Other than that, I loved it! Keep it up.