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Remnants on The Mantle MAG

November 9, 2008
By Markmywords GOLD, Noblesville, Indiana
Markmywords GOLD, Noblesville, Indiana
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I am not you,
just the remnants from
the mantle
of a deteriorating family,
whisked away by the man with
a crowbar and a blackening handle.
When we used to be a
threefold troupe,
and you stomped all over it
to crush the picture with your dirty foot.

It’s about time I rise up from
who you are.
I am so much more
than your deafening
Bravery and risk taking
is who I am
and you are nothing
but the woman on the floor
crying over your spilled milk.
I am so much more.

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on Sep. 4 2010 at 9:57 am
-LeftBehindBroken- GOLD, Providence, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Artists paint on canvas; Musicians paint on silence

i love your sentence structure and word choice! Good metaphors also! :)

on Jul. 15 2010 at 1:50 pm
bbygurl21 PLATINUM, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
sticks n stones my brick my bones but words cant

this is real good.

on Jun. 8 2010 at 8:46 pm
Babygurl_101 SILVER, N/A, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Angels are the quiet girls that just havent been noticed yet"
"The past is the past, and i am your futuer." (<3<3<3<3<3)

this poem is so awesome!!! you did an excelent job~ keep writting, very powerful

on May. 17 2010 at 4:48 pm
sunnyhunny PLATINUM, Litchfield, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind."

Extremely powerful!

E.Lee GOLD said...
on May. 17 2010 at 10:20 am
E.Lee GOLD, Akron, Ohio
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500 stars! good job:)

on Oct. 2 2009 at 11:41 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This piece is very deep. Love it! Especially the ending.

on May. 23 2009 at 1:43 am
ParasiticVirtue SILVER, Arlington, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Live like we're dying" -Kris Allen "Never take life to seriously. You'll never make it out alive" -Van Wilder "Dream as if you'll live forever. Live as if you'll die tomorrow." -James Dean

i kno a person who seems to let of the same character in her writing.

KiKi3 SILVER said...
on May. 22 2009 at 5:32 pm
KiKi3 SILVER, Toledo, Ohio
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OMG- I love your poem. Really makes me think

Keep writing

Jaquie BRONZE said...
on May. 22 2009 at 11:32 am
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

Nice job with this one. I love the title; it really speaks to me. I also liked the last line. Very, very, nice job. Congratulations on getting published. You've gone places in this that the rest of us can only dream of. Keep writing.

God Bless,


on May. 6 2009 at 11:07 pm
EleanorRigby PLATINUM, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The optomist proclaims we live in the best of worlds, and the pessimist fears this is true." - James Branch Cabell

wow i feel like i can relate to it even though your inspiration is probably very different from what i'm thinking. great job!

Duckie430 said...
on Apr. 20 2009 at 7:15 pm
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

wow. this is amazing.

on Apr. 19 2009 at 11:18 pm
TheRealAriel1995 PLATINUM, Highland Village, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"See in what peace a Christian can die." - Joseph Addison
"How come everyone will come to your funeral, but nobody will come see you when you are living?"

WONDERFUL. makes people really think

LilJ<3 GOLD said...
on Apr. 10 2009 at 11:33 pm
LilJ<3 GOLD, Gloucester, Virginia
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This poem was powerful in its own way... Great job and continue to write...Congrats on being published :).

♥ Jackie

on Apr. 9 2009 at 2:56 am
foreverdreaming14 PLATINUM, Redmond, Washington
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This is such a touching poem, thank you for writing it.