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Natures Perfection

May 6, 2014
By JJ_Lone PLATINUM, Davenport, Washington
JJ_Lone PLATINUM, Davenport, Washington
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Its beautiful.
Flowers blooming.
Sun smiling down on me.
The silence,

Look closely at the grass,
as it shines
and gleams.
As the dew slips down
on the smooth soft leaf.

Upturned roots,
still bare,
rising high in the sky
as though they can reach
the heavens.

The birds,
while the wind
glides through their feathers
and keeps them afloat.

The smell of flowers,
tender to my nose.
The ruffle of the grass,
as the wind blows
tickles my ear.

The sun,
peaking over the hilltop.
A kid wanting to play
with nature,
and nothing more.

The wind,
blows my hair
like a sail.
It feels good...
It all feels good.

Natures perfection,
has infused my life
with the peace
of my mind.

The author's comments:
nature is so peaceful to me. i look around and i always take everything in.

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This article has 6 comments.

on Jul. 24 2014 at 11:41 pm
MattMattHatter PLATINUM, Bellevue, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Poetry is thoughts that breathe, and words that burn. "
Thomas Gray

Lovely ^~^ I'll say it again form and half rhyming thing you got goin on is great (mine tends to lack form and rhyme) keep writing darling :)

on May. 30 2014 at 11:38 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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It's a lovely poem. Grammar irritates me - 'it's' not 'its' in your first line ahhh - but other than that, it's great. Some bits need linking words and don't need commas, but in other places you've used them well :) Very nice

Psychedelik said...
on May. 22 2014 at 3:03 pm
Psychedelik, Urbandale, Iowa
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It's peaceful.  Very well written!

on May. 21 2014 at 10:34 pm
Shade3043 DIAMOND, Shade3043 Did This, In Case Of Anonymous, Other
87 articles 0 photos 168 comments

Favorite Quote:
When I was a boy, I would always hear scary things in the news and my mother would say to me, "Always look for the helpers. Everywhere you look you will always find people helping." - Fred Rogers

I've no real criticisms, minus the usage of the word "afloat" to describe something in the air. The rest of it is probably exactly what you aimed for. Serene natural imagery. 4.5/5.

on May. 14 2014 at 1:12 pm
Sunshine2420 SILVER, Unknown, Other
9 articles 0 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
A smile hides everything.

Great thinking. You've written it really beautifully :)

on May. 9 2014 at 6:31 pm
LavanderMayday SILVER, Oroville, California
7 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writers aren't exactly one person, they're a whole bunch of people trying to be one person"

I think this is my favorite one of the poems that I read of yours so far. VERY very good.. =) I loved how you described things. I liked how you wrote: "Look closely at the grass, as it shines and gleams. As the dew slips down on the smooth soft leaf" That was just a beautiful part there. Anyways I really loved this poem and keep up the awesome poetry.