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Winter Happiness MAG

December 13, 2008
By 18lissa92 BRONZE, San Antonio, Texas
18lissa92 BRONZE, San Antonio, Texas
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sitting on my rooftop
in the cold winter air
with my sister
side by side
counting every star
and wishing on the ones
we think are the brightest
until we get so tired
we can barely keep our eyes open.

so we climb down
helping each other along the way
as we trip on the ends
of our baggy sleepy pants
lead each other through
the darkness of the house
skipping over the loose floorboards
trying not to wake mom.

climb underneath the
blankets of our squeaky bed
and listen to her voice
as she tells me everything about her day
until i’m way too tired to reply
and fall asleep ….

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on Oct. 7 2012 at 8:15 pm
Zithia PLATINUM, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"It makes no difference who or what you are, old or young, black or white, pagan, Jew, or Christian, I want to love you all and be loved by you all, and I mean to have your love." -Victoria Woodhull

I am very critical of poems, maybe a little too critical, but I love this.  The tone, diction and syntax is perfect.  There is a dreamy quality about this poem that is very appropriate.  The flow is great too. 

on Sep. 15 2012 at 7:09 pm
eleniapostolatos GOLD, Doral, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
We count the broken lyres that rest
Where the sweet wailing singers slumber.

Good job. I have a little sister - and this is the exact feeling I have in nights like those. I completely adored this poem, great work.

on Mar. 23 2012 at 2:31 pm
Court901 BRONZE, Magnolia, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagniation is not a talent of some people, but it is the health of every person" -Ralph Waldo Emerson

I love this. It is simple and happiness comes with simple things.

Fia-fia BRONZE said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 6:52 pm
Fia-fia BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
4 articles 1 photo 157 comments
This is really sweet, and true happiness. Happiness comes from the little things, and it is so sweet to see the wonderful connection between the characters. Thank you :)

on Dec. 26 2011 at 6:43 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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I really enjoy the simplicity. Great job!

on Dec. 9 2011 at 1:35 am
Cbsiegel BRONZE, Lake Oswego, Oregon
2 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
A woman whose smile is open and whose expression is glad has a kind of beauty no matter what she wears.
Anne Roiphe

I can literally see it happening in my head...

Great Job!

Dreammer GOLD said...
on Nov. 12 2011 at 11:39 am
Dreammer GOLD, Montrose, Pennsylvania
19 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is like quicksand the further you fall the harder it is to get out

Enjoyable piece I enjoyed it:)

on Oct. 21 2011 at 10:20 am
A very touching reminds me of those times when my sister and I aren't fighting.  It's times like those when we're the best of friends.

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jul. 3 2011 at 1:40 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

I really like this poem!! It's very exquisite! This poem reminds me of really good winter nights that me and my sister have enjoyed!! :) 

IamRevy BRONZE said...
on Jul. 3 2011 at 11:14 am
IamRevy BRONZE, State Of Mind, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Trying to please the world is a self-made curse"

Lucky you, this is pretty deep and kind of sweet to an extent always imagined something like this never thought it existed, lucky you once again 

on Jun. 30 2011 at 12:23 am
Loverboy12 BRONZE, Bakersfield, California
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Favorite Quote:
Stoooopid is as stoopid does

I love this poem from the begining becuase snow is my fav season but i also wish me and my sisters were that close

J.P. said...
on May. 20 2011 at 12:39 pm
T_T I want to cry everytime I read this.

J.P. said...
on May. 20 2011 at 12:23 pm
You know, I wish me and my sister could get along as well as you two.

on Apr. 6 2011 at 3:44 pm PLATINUM, Tosa, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm in love with you, and I know that love is just a shout into a void, and that oblivion is inevitable... and I know the sun will swallow the only earth we'll ever have, and I am in love with you." Augustus Waters

dfefinitely. i want to say everything you did :))

kvater said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 12:05 pm
i really enjoyed this poem its something alot of people could relate to and i like the imagery.

on Feb. 21 2011 at 11:48 pm
decievinghimesama SILVER, Cebu, Other
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I love this piece♥

on Oct. 12 2010 at 6:50 pm
redAKbabygirl22 BRONZE, Mountain Village, Alaska
2 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live Life to the Fullest

i really like this piece of writing. its reminds me soo much of me and my older sister. thank you! now i can share another thing with her...

on Jun. 24 2010 at 4:02 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

This is really pretty and I can see it in my mind. I have a question: roughly how long after you submitted this did it take for teenink to approve it and post it online???

on Jun. 8 2010 at 10:58 am
roxannemaria29 SILVER, North Cape May, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, and today is a gift, thats why we call it the present.

i like this alot, can really relate and reminise.

on May. 14 2010 at 9:10 am
Kadamade BRONZE, Murfreesboro, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Any quotes by Dr. Seuss!

I love this. My sister and I have a great bond like this poem illustrates. It's great! You did a wonderful job, and keep up the good work!