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Soul Eater

December 7, 2014
By Raven01 BRONZE, Ocean, New Jersey
Raven01 BRONZE, Ocean, New Jersey
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

In the dark of the night, a little girl sat upon a swing
Wondering when someone would want to hear her sing
She sat in the dark, her heart open wide
And all of a sudden began to cry
No fun, no friends, no family to care
She realized how alone she was sitting there
A kind gentle heart was all that she bared
That sweet little girl was lonely and scared
A few years went by and that sweet little girl.
Had been gnawned and impaled by the cold hardened world
Now she sits on that swing all cold and withdrawn
The old self she knew was almost all gone
She watched the sun set and she sang out once more
"This life could`ve been great but I can`t try anymore"
Looking into the darkness, this sweet little girl
Let society change her and shake up her world
This sweet little girl resides within me
I know that she is who i wish again to be
So let the sun come down, drown your sorrows away
Before the moon comes in the darkness
And reclaims your soul for all eternity
Let the sun be bright as it always should be
For when the moon comes again i will take it with me
Society can hurt a little girls heart
And make her believe she wasn`t worth it from the start
There`s a sheild and a mask, never to be unveiled
In society no love or kindess will ever prevail
Every night in the darkness that broken girl screams
Is there hope for tomorrow? is normal all it seems?
Your body and heart are not yours anymore
Without a sheild a mask a sweet little girl

The author's comments:

I originally wrote this poem for a scholarship poetry contest. The theme was to write a poem about a "mask" that you hide behind. This poem came out to be a lot more powerful than I thought. So I want to share it with everyone that I can. 

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This article has 13 comments.

Ana143 GOLD said...
on Feb. 2 2015 at 9:40 pm
Ana143 GOLD, Bolivar, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your always beautiful in my eyes"
"Be who you are not what someone else wants you to be"

This poem hit me hard.I use to think i was alone, i didn't have many friends, but the ones i did have i pushed away. Picked on all the time, never letting my family see my pain or ever talk to them. tbh i did do self harm but i meet someone who helped me out of the dark and i felt alive. even though that person hurt me and i was destroyed i have found a way to vent my feelings through writing and running and now i try to help people who are like i was. This poem was really good and i can't wait to read more by you. And thank you for sharing it.

Raven01 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 23 2014 at 10:49 am
Raven01 BRONZE, Ocean, New Jersey
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Thank you very much ! :)

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Dec. 22 2014 at 10:05 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

I actually helped my cousin with this same scholarship contest. She chose to write about wearing make up all the time, as her "mask." This was really nice though, makes you think about your own past. The ending is very effective as well. Well done, and keep writing!

Raven01 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 20 2014 at 5:16 pm
Raven01 BRONZE, Ocean, New Jersey
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Thank you so much! @MalaikaJ Please share with your friends. I hope this poem can show other teens that they aren`t alone.

Raven01 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 20 2014 at 5:15 pm
Raven01 BRONZE, Ocean, New Jersey
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Well I originally wrote this poem for a scholarship. I put a lot of work into it and it ended up coming out to be very powerful. I pretty much based it on how I have changed drastically from my childhood. The swing is also symbolism for the ups and downs that I`ve had throughout my life. :) I`m glad you enjoyed the poem. Please share it with your friends!

MalaikaJ GOLD said...
on Dec. 20 2014 at 12:55 pm
MalaikaJ GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
19 articles 2 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love writing. I love the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions. - James Michener

I love this! It was beautiful. It flowed super well and I loved the rhymes. Sadly, this is so true for many people. I especially loved the lines "Let society change her and/ shake up her world". Fantastic job!

on Dec. 20 2014 at 4:20 am
IBelongInNewYork, Pocatello, Idaho
0 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Happiness is the key to life, so what is the key to happiness?"

- Me

I really really like this . what was your inspiration? I mean its probably obvious but I want to be sure I understand the poem completely before I go makin accusations.

Raven01 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 19 2014 at 9:29 pm
Raven01 BRONZE, Ocean, New Jersey
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Thanks! I hope to post more poems soon.

Raven01 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 19 2014 at 9:29 pm
Raven01 BRONZE, Ocean, New Jersey
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Thank you very much. :)

on Dec. 19 2014 at 12:28 pm
authoress17 SILVER, Evans City, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If there is no such thing as magic...then what is writing?."-authoress17 (me)

Wow great use of emotion. This piece was so sad, but very touching. Thanks for posting. You are a wonderful writer!

Taymmc SILVER said...
on Dec. 19 2014 at 12:15 pm
Taymmc SILVER, Bellevue, Ohio
7 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is no sinner like a young saint; Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream-Edgar Allen Poe; Out of the deep depths of misfortune comes bliss; The only way to cope with change is to place youself into the change.

Very creative yet as well very sad. You are an excellent writer.

on Dec. 19 2014 at 11:24 am
ansem_unlimited PLATINUM, Frederick, Maryland
33 articles 0 photos 140 comments

Favorite Quote:
Thou may think of me as desired, to idolize or villanize me whichever you may choose. but gaze upon me and thou sall not see the husk of a man! for all my sins and all my bliss, i am anything but hollow

this is very sad... the loneliness is paired with this impartial yet, foreboding style you write in. it touches me, it saddens me.

-Mavis- BRONZE said...
on Dec. 17 2014 at 8:56 pm
-Mavis- BRONZE, Hilo, Hawaii
2 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"pretty words are worth being cynical over, for they are just baits to be caught in the moment." -mavi

"What exactly would change if I cried, wanted revenge, was consumed by hatred, or went insane with rage?" -Yoshino

"I am your shadow. Worry not for if your light is dim, I will become darker so that you can become more defined.“ -mavi

"We create beautiful things to mask what we destroyed in order to create such.” -mavi

I loved this, very creative diction. the meaning is great.