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February 3, 2009
By Alexander Pollak GOLD, San Francisco, California
Alexander Pollak GOLD, San Francisco, California
13 articles 0 photos 5 comments

I have traveled the spine of the coast
curved like a turtle’s shell
Trekked over mountains
like sharp incisors
and then across the soft bulge of the prairie’s belly
swollen with disease
Walked through canyons’
cracks on the massive skull of the desert

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on Feb. 6 2012 at 11:36 am
morgie21 BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Amazing imagery! The diction and word choice was great. the contrast between soft and sharp words were so intriguing

on Feb. 6 2012 at 11:20 am
JosephEdward BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 3 comments
Great job! It gave good descriptive words as well as metaphors. However I didnt really get what you were trying to tell the reader.

Desti_B SILVER said...
on Nov. 10 2011 at 8:34 pm
Desti_B SILVER, Arima, Other
9 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
haven't decided on one lol..sorry's vivid and it comes alive when u read it..

snatcher said...
on Jan. 28 2011 at 2:00 am
This is wonderful. I love the metaphors and the textures and the adventure.

Nyrihaz said...
on Nov. 23 2010 at 7:13 pm
Nyrihaz, Isabela, Other
0 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Listen to the screams a silent room makes"

Fantastic descriptions here. It kinds of feel... like you are going to tell me something and never say it; but the way you paint a picture with your words are worth the open (or never there) ending.

Continue Writing =]

on Aug. 27 2010 at 12:43 pm
book-keeper26 BRONZE, Oak Ridge, New Jersey
3 articles 8 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
People come in and out of our lives for a reason, the trick, is knowing when to let them go.. and when to hold onto them even tighter.

the symbolism was nice but... what were you even trying to tell me, as the reader? i got no definative voice/emotion from this.

noname37014 said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 9:42 am
noname37014, Holland, Michigan
0 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"As I write I create myself again and again."
-Joy Harjo

It's a great poem, with amazing descriptions, I would've liked a more satisfying ending

on Aug. 15 2010 at 10:20 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

good imagery, even if it was morbid... did you not enjoy the trip? read some of mine?

JCG14 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 2 2010 at 10:32 pm
JCG14 PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
21 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Let it go, and it will all come back to you."

You paint great pictures with your words, keep it up!

Eilatan GOLD said...
on Apr. 17 2010 at 9:57 am
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

wow. this is really good.

on Mar. 19 2010 at 3:23 am
SolvoAnimus BRONZE, Jamaica, New York
1 article 0 photos 29 comments
this is nothing but pure inspiration for me....

Not the Words, but the content...

I mean...nature is the shiyza..

on Feb. 10 2010 at 8:00 pm
sonnysulouff BRONZE, Clarendon Hills, Illinois
4 articles 0 photos 34 comments
Short, sweet, but really makes an impact. Awesome.

on Feb. 10 2010 at 4:40 pm
wixchick BRONZE, Marion, Indiana
2 articles 0 photos 11 comments
wonderful descriptions that really pack a punch.

on Feb. 10 2010 at 4:07 pm
Acalleq PLATINUM, Togiak, Alaska
22 articles 5 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
you never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have

so much truth. sometimes its hard to write the truth, but you never know who needs that truth and how much it helps ppl. thnx

Tangnefedd said...
on Nov. 14 2009 at 12:23 pm
Tangnefedd, Manson, Iowa
0 articles 0 photos 6 comments
The eerie description of the Earth as a famished, sickening body ("prairie's belly/swollen with disease") is bold and effective...and the juxtaposition of the traveler is a fascinating relationship...

on Nov. 14 2009 at 10:33 am
Poet_in_Motion PLATINUM, Sharon, Massachusetts
24 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love one another." –George Harrison (his last words)

"and down they forgot as up they grew" –e.e. cummings

"The sea is just a wetter version of the sky..." –Regina Spektor

Lovely. :)

Heather said...
on Nov. 13 2009 at 1:53 am
Haha--no, I'm hoping that he'll become the first Alex!

on Oct. 1 2009 at 8:20 pm
NinaFarryn SILVER, Roanoke Rapids, North Carolina
5 articles 28 photos 24 comments
This is fantastic! I've been to the grand canyon, the way you descibe it makes such a vivid mental picture....

Great job!

colliganc said...
on Oct. 1 2009 at 7:44 pm
This poem had great description. I felt like I was standing at the end of the Grand Canyon looking at how it cuves like a turtle's shell. When you say " and then across the soft bulge of the prairie's belly" I think of it as how beep and long the canyon is. You also state "cracks on the massive skull of the dessert" the canyon being a massive skull from long ago with so much history to it. I relate to this poem so well because i have traveled to the Grand Canyon and it brings back so many wonderful memories. One day I hope I can go back because the caynon is so amazing. You did a great job.

on Jun. 16 2009 at 2:42 am
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
54 articles 2 photos 748 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

This was VERY inspiring to me! I loved it! I loved how you used body parts: Skull belly incisors spine turtles shell... LOVED IT! Very good comparison! Good luck with furthur writing!