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the day i swallowed the sun

May 26, 2018
By saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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the day i finally caught the sun
between my lips
was the day i was set free
from the iron cage
with its iron bars,
that crushed my arms
and shattered my lungs.
i closed my eyes
and let the golden flames
drip down the back of my throat
and coat my tongue like honey.
i felt it spread through
my chest,
felt the thing i
had been chasing
for years
and years
and years.
i watched as the inky blackness
that had suffocated me
for so many silent nights
bled from my fingertips and
sunk into the dirt,
staining the daisies
and wilting the poppies.
a golden bead
down my cheek,
and i wondered
why my tears
had never tasted so
sitting down with the sunflowers,
i watched the cotton candy
float across the baby blue sky,
and began writing about
the day i swallowed the sun.

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on Jun. 17 at 8:47 am
Adrika_15 SILVER, Midnapur West, Other
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We just simply started believing that spring is beautiful

Wow! The metaphors and imagery are so strong. It felt so real! Great work!

on Apr. 23 at 10:55 am
ellareadsbooks BRONZE, Cambridge, Ontario
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Favorite Quote:
"The purpose of a storyteller is not to tell you how to think, but to give you questions to think upon." - Brandon Sanderson

I love this, the imagery was so vivid!

aubreyvernon said...
on Apr. 1 at 10:16 am
aubreyvernon, Grandville, Michigan
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I love this poem!!

on Apr. 1 at 6:45 am
SparrowSun ELITE, X, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
"It Will Be Good." (complicated semi-spiritual emotional story.)
And the words I say most often: "Where was I?"
"I just switched 50 things to anonymus and it doesnt even make a diff- why was i writing this again? where was i? hm.... oh well."

i love it its beautiful!

Dre_2021 said...
on Oct. 15 2020 at 8:33 am
Dre_2021, Ewing, New Jersey
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I really liked the symbolism you showed in this poem

on Aug. 16 2019 at 9:05 am
imjasminemiller, Chicago, Illinois
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I really like it, REminds me of the wat I write.

on Jun. 27 2019 at 2:23 pm
mackara_lynn_rose BRONZE, Coeur D Alene, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
"The moon taught me it's ok to go through phases and the sun taught me that no matter how many times I fall, I can still keep rising."
"Your value does not decrease based on someone's inability to see your worth."

Wow, that's amazing!!! Keep it up!

cheythepoet said...
on Jan. 22 2019 at 1:50 pm
cheythepoet, El Paso, Texas
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i don't even have words for how brilliant this is, thank you for writing and thank you for sharing it. <3

on Dec. 19 2018 at 4:47 pm
kristjanscott BRONZE, Columbia, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Atticus,he was real nice...."

"Most people are,sout,when you finally see them"

-To Kill A Mockingbird,HAPPER LEE

i want to swallow the sun!

on Dec. 19 2018 at 11:15 am
jakejh PLATINUM, Murphysboro, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Don't set boundaries for yourself.
Because building boundaries is only going to keep you from doing the things you want to do.

This is amazingly vivid. Keep up writing awesome poetry. Feel free to check out my poetry if you don't mind.

on Nov. 28 2018 at 2:08 pm
Sophia_LaPalme DIAMOND, Loxley, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
“In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life: it goes on.”
― Robert Frost

Wow! That was proof that simplicity is beautiful.

on Oct. 24 2018 at 3:51 pm
cat_the_creative GOLD, Austin, Texas
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All endings are beginnings


Catniss SILVER said...
on Oct. 20 2018 at 12:53 pm
Catniss SILVER, Jakarta, Other
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So beautifully and uniquely. Nice use of symbolism.

SonnyT BRONZE said...
on Oct. 16 2018 at 9:25 am
SonnyT BRONZE, Columbus, Ohio
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This is beautiful! The language, the imagery, I really enjoyed reading this poem!!

on Oct. 13 2018 at 3:22 pm
williamgrantland, Columbia, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
“Injustice everywhere is a threat to justice everywhere.” Martin Luther King, Jr.
“Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken.” Unknown

wow! awesome job!!

on Oct. 1 2018 at 9:51 am
CheerSwimmer8 SILVER, Browntown, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Do it with passion or not at all

I want to swallow the sun now that was beautiful

kmagic BRONZE said...
on Sep. 28 2018 at 10:17 am
kmagic BRONZE, Denver, Colorado
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This made me almost cry my god this is such a beautiful peace.

on Sep. 25 2018 at 10:35 pm
californiapoppy BRONZE, Hayward, California
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Favorite Quote:
For whatever we lose(like a you or a me)
it's always ourselves we find in the sea
- ee cummings

This is so beautifullllllll
I’m dyinggggggg

deanib SILVER said...
on Sep. 18 2018 at 7:54 pm
deanib SILVER, Valle Vista, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Put your ear down close to your soul and listen hard." -Anne Sexton

I really enjoyed your description of how the sun felt in your chest and how it coated your tongue. However, I would say that the ending doesn't really fell resolved.

on Sep. 12 2018 at 10:50 am
rockstar_KK GOLD, Farmington, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm still figuring out who I am. But I know I'm not who I once was." -Brendon Urie, from Panic! At The Disco

Very descriptive. Well done.