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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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on Apr. 2 2012 at 10:42 pm
HouseofYork GOLD, Powhatan, Virginia
12 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...Time and Chance happened to them all." Ecc 9:11

Very well doneand easily relateable, good work

on Apr. 2 2012 at 6:41 pm
Gypsyroses SILVER, Lower Merion, Pennsylvania
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I can relate to this poem so much. One of my best friends has changed so much, I don't even think we relate anymore. 

on Mar. 22 2012 at 9:38 am
Jaycee92 PLATINUM, Lincoln, Nebraska
27 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Expect the Unexpected"

Great poem!

Kianie GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 1:57 pm
Kianie GOLD, Westphalia, Kansas
10 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are the music as the music lasts" - Stevie Wonder

I dislike it when my friends change for the worse. ]: Totally relatable sonnet! Nice job!

on Feb. 7 2012 at 7:31 pm
nauset.johnson BRONZE, Brewster, Massachusetts
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Whats good about this poem is that it will always be true, like much of Shakespeare's work. Although like his, it's not in Shakespearean Sonnet form, or any other form I am aware of. With that said, I think this poem is great and the rhyming that it does have is perfect. Personally, I am not a fan of poems that every line rhymes somewhere; I like ones where there is a little rhyme here and there, giving it a definite song sense. Overalll, a job well done.

TrishhG BRONZE said...
on Feb. 4 2012 at 12:55 pm
TrishhG BRONZE, Vaughan, Other
3 articles 0 photos 1 comment
This poem was really good and I feel relevant as well. I really do feel as if it describes my relationship with some people. Really Good :)

DaiDaii said...
on Jan. 27 2012 at 11:07 pm
DaiDaii, New Rochelle, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Elizabeth Bishop

'It took me fifteen years to discover I had no talent for writing, but I couldn't give it up because by that time I was too famous.'

Hey, This is really good this is my first time on the site and I already see awesome things you have a talent!! Cherish it

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2012 at 12:09 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
14 articles 7 photos 137 comments
This is a great poem and I can definitely relate :) Would you mind reading my poem A Pink Watch, Portal, and Perpetual Sea?

on Jan. 27 2012 at 8:42 am
chloena_garrett GOLD, Colorado City, Texas
19 articles 13 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet.

Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep.

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.

Art is the only way to run away without leaving home.

This poem is amazing. I can definitely relate. I'd love it if you could check out some of my poems and leave a comment and rating. I really like the way you write.

Kate298 SILVER said...
on Jan. 26 2012 at 5:55 pm
Kate298 SILVER, Syracuse, New York
6 articles 2 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
You can't have a signal in the sky, but I'll be your hero.

Loved this poem, I tagged it as a favorite :) I can totally relate to the topic, my poems are very similar to this one.

.king. SILVER said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 12:17 pm
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
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I did enjoy it Blue, I really enjoyed the rhyming and the read !!!

on Jan. 10 2012 at 10:35 pm
aforetimes SILVER, Cheyenne, Wyoming
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I love this poem! It's very easy to relate to.

on Jan. 5 2012 at 3:46 pm
rescuetruck607 GOLD, Bellmore, New York
13 articles 28 photos 6 comments
love it!! keep up the good work!

vazenitran98 said...
on Dec. 31 2011 at 1:12 pm
vazenitran98, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I had the blues because I had no shoes until upon the street,I met a man who had no feet."

Love it!What a great poem!

on Dec. 26 2011 at 5:56 pm
northursday BRONZE, Fredericksburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
When I was 5 years old, my mother always told me that happiness was the key to life, when I went to school, they asked me what I wanted to be when I grew up, I wrote down "Happy," they told me I didn't understand the assignment, I told them they didn't understand life."
- John Lennon

This is great, but the structure is wrong for a sonnet. I love the message, though.

on Dec. 14 2011 at 6:04 pm
aurorairis SILVER, Darien, Connecticut
6 articles 0 photos 27 comments

I love this! It is so profound and relatable! I know exactly what you are talking about!

Please check out some of my work!


on Dec. 14 2011 at 3:51 pm
MoonHeart SILVER, PITTSBURGH, Pennsylvania
5 articles 0 photos 7 comments
I know exactly what you mean. With my exboyfriend, and my best friend it's exactly the same way. I can't stand it, and it makes me sad. It makes me remember the really good days we had together and how they used to act. I wish they still acted that way. I wish they were still the people I knew and loved.

Fia-fia BRONZE said...
on Dec. 14 2011 at 11:18 am
Fia-fia BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
4 articles 1 photo 157 comments

This is a wonderful poem. I agree with wat you are saying but i also take from it something else. I am also seeing it not as a friend, but like if you had an old boyfriend or girlfriend, and things have changed. THank you!

:)


on Dec. 14 2011 at 10:29 am
MakenzieB. SILVER, Apison, Tennessee
5 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you wish to see in the world"~ghandi (and) "No one can make you inferior without your consent"~Eleanor Roosevelt

I can totally relate to this. It's the same case as going back to school after summer's over and your friends act like they don't even know you ar want to be near you anymore. Great piece of work! Keep on writing!

Dollface2012 said...
on Dec. 12 2011 at 2:44 pm
Dollface2012,
0 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
\'Imperfection is beauty, genious is madness, and its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring\" -Marylin Monroe

This poem is great ! The emotion it evokes is very easy to relate to. Such a short lenghted poem telling such a long story. I like this poem alot.