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Opulence MAG

May 1, 2008
By AquaGem SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
AquaGem SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

Life it too short to let you matter.

I’ve been watching him for days now. When he leaves his house to go to school, I’m the one carefully tailing him, switching cars every day to make myself look less suspicious. If he ever sneaks out of his second-story room, I’ll be the one silently watching from a nearby tree. In class when he turns, feeling eyes on the back of his head, I’m the one who sent the hair on the back of his neck up on end. I am the girl whose shadow is always slightly overlapping his.

Being assigned to watch him almost makes me
feel like I’m not a stalker. Though I’m only 17, I’m a full-fledged member of the organization known as O.P.U.L.E.N.C.E. I’ve been with them since the ­tender age of five. It’s my home. Being an orphan, my office is also my permanent residence, the couch a fold-out bed. There are many others like me: no family. A lot of us are loners and haven’t chosen this route for ourselves.

I’m a tracker. I have been for years and some might say that I am the best at not being the best. In other words, I’m great at being invisible. Or at not being noticed. It’s not as hard as the others in the organization think. Being young and female is good, since most we track are young. Seeing me around younger people – my age, actually – doesn’t raise alarm bells. It helps that I’m cute. With a small frame, light hazel eyes, and short blond hair that curls under my chin, I don’t appear threatening. Of course, my ­organization-funded training doesn’t back that theory.

Soon I won’t be tracking down others with the power. They are finally going to give me an apprentice. After years of mastering everything I’ve been taught, they see my potential. That’s not to say I know everything. Even with my extended life I won’t be able to learn all the things I want to. If only this annoying boy would show the signs. It’s been almost a week. If he doesn’t show soon, they’ll reassign me. That much longer until I get my apprentice.

So here I am, sipping a latté and waiting for the Target to leave for school. I have been put in all of his classes in case something happens there, though I graduated high school years ago. Private tutors sped things up. With no family or personal ties, I had lots of time to devote to my studies. Martial arts black belts. Twelve languages, not including English. Everything a girl needs for a serious career in the agency. Such positions of power are not handed out easily. You must prove yourself many times over.

The Target and I have never spoken, but I know a lot about him. His file told me some, but after watching him for only a few days, I feel confident in saying that I know things no one else does. Not just the obvious, either. He resents his father and is protective of his mother, which makes me suspect the father is less than faithful. He smiles often but doesn’t make a lot of eye contact. He usually only speaks when spoken to. Although he has many friends, he isn’t close with any of them. The Target is observant, a watcher. This leads me to believe we would get along if he shows any promise.

I look down at my watch, then back at his house a few blocks away. The Target is late, which means I’ll be late too. Today my ride is a shiny black sports car, not out of place in this suburb full of midlife-crisis men. I turn on the engine impatiently. I’m fiddling with the radio when I hear something. I don’t feel any immediate danger, and I know to trust those feelings. But I ­also know that something is off.

Just as I am about to get out of the car and pretend to look in the trunk, the passenger door opens. I look up in surprise as the Target slides into the seat next to me. I grin, quite pleased by this turn of events. This is definitely a good sign. Perhaps intuition is strong in him. That would be good for my apprentice to have, complementary. I could handle having to deal with that.

“Hello, Lenna. Why have you been following me for a week now?” the Target asks lightly, conversationally, his first words ever said in my direction.

Ah, one of my many aliases. The organization set it up so that whenever I’m on a case, I get a new name, past, and present. It’s very powerful. The organization can basically do anything it needs; it has people everywhere imaginable. I’m just one of many, though there aren’t that many at the top, as I am. They don’t trust many to be trackers. Or to be apprentices. All of the full members have the power, though we control others to get things done.

My smile deepens as I say in my authoritative, professional voice, “My real name is Jade. I am a witch of the moon and a tracker for the organization known as O.P.U.L.E.N.C.E. You are also a witch. We would like to formally welcome you into the organization as my apprentice. Here is my card for verification.”

Jade Wordsworth
Tracker for O.P.U.L.E.N.C.E
Official Political Understanding Lending ­Everyone ­Navigation for Co-Existing Ethereals
Office hours: 8 a.m.-3 p.m. Mon-Sat
Phone: 555-5555
Proud league of witches of the sun and moon.

“What do you mean ‘moon and sun’? Or ‘tracker’?” he asks, still looking at my card like it’s going to ­disappear.

“Types of magic. Moon is all about spells, the sun is more potion-based, though each type of witchcraft involves the other somehow. As a tracker, I find people like you and I bring them to O.P.U.L.E.N.C.E. Every witch must register, train, and become a member by law. In fact, the organization is like a government targeted toward witches,” I explain with a smile, loving the fact that this time I get to teach the newbie.

“Magic? Seriously?” he asks, eyes wide, meeting mine. They are large, yellow, and catlike.

I click a button on my left, automatically locking the doors. I put the car into drive, pulling out onto the road. As an afterthought I add as a courtesy, “I think you had better come with me.” .

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on Apr. 26 2016 at 8:53 am
tardistraveler241 BRONZE, Columbus, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"I am not throwing away my shot." - Lin-Manuel Miranda

I love the combination between magic and spies, two genres that aren't really brought together very often. The magic element kind of felt rushed and just thrown in, if you were to expand on the magical part of this universe in the future that would be amazing.

on Dec. 20 2015 at 3:56 am
GillianBorromeo PLATINUM, San Pedro City, Laguna, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"The reward of a thing well done is having done it."

Ralph Waldo Emerson

continuation please!!

on Nov. 6 2015 at 6:40 am
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very nice... i liked it

on Oct. 15 2015 at 6:48 am
AliviaNicole BRONZE, Mayfield Village, Ohio
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Wait can you keep writing off of this?

Cam_is_Away said...
on Jun. 14 2015 at 12:30 am
Cam_is_Away, Non, California
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No! I want to read more! I personally agree with JohnPaulGeorgeandRingo, the fact that you involved witchery and magic, kind of threw me off. I had to re-read it a few times only realize I had been reading it right, and that it indeed said 'magic'. It felt like you had kind of just threw it in there. You did a fantastic job, however. You explained in a way that hooked the reader, making them beg for more, not to mention the first paragraph with the actual hook! It brought an on-edge wariness, then we get the explanation that she's sort of like a secret agent, and we jump up for joy and cheer over such an exciting development. I deeply enjoyed your story, I hope you continue with it, and great job :-)

notmehaha GOLD said...
on Apr. 13 2015 at 8:11 pm
notmehaha GOLD, Suffolk, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel. Those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Suess

I was thinking the exact same thing about Him, Her, and the Receptionist. I think the website's sort of trying to divert attention to all the top rated stories of all time, to the top rated stories of today.

on Mar. 18 2015 at 10:00 am
katiekoller BRONZE, Lincoln, Rhode Island
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sadly she left us with a cliffhanger

on Mar. 18 2015 at 10:00 am
Teresa Girard BRONZE, Smithfield, Rhode Island
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on Mar. 18 2015 at 9:59 am
katiekoller BRONZE, Lincoln, Rhode Island
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love the cliffhanger!!!!! :)

on Mar. 12 2015 at 8:25 am
LifeLeader PLATINUM, Roanoke, Virginia
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I love it! Are you going to continue the story?

on Feb. 3 2015 at 7:47 am
French_Gold SILVER, Waynesville, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
There's plenty of sense in nonsense, if you wish to look for it.
-Cassandra Clare

Cliffhanger! This is awesome.

on Dec. 11 2014 at 6:36 pm
kimberlyguzmanx SILVER, Holbrook, New York
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Favorite Quote:
The next chapter in your life, will always be more interesting than the last..

this is a seriously cool piece and idea. 

on Nov. 13 2014 at 11:13 am
Anyuhhhh BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
It's hard to beat someone who never gives up

I first want to say this is a really interesting piece of work and I can not wait to read the next part if you continue this story. I suggest a little more dialogue but I love your topic and that there was mystery to it. I wouldn't have put that magic in the end, maybe the last sentences could be a little different. Other than that, I think this piece has good potential and could be taken to another level! I really enjoyed this piece, it kept me involved to the end.

LueReion said...
on Sep. 20 2014 at 7:01 pm
LueReion, Ocala, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
“Some infinities are bigger than other infinities.”
― John Green, The Fault in Our Stars

Wow this is really intriguing so far! Also it's a unique story good job :)

on Jul. 10 2014 at 11:37 pm
Jacboyd7 BRONZE, Sonoma, California
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Very Good!! It is a great story and I can't wait to ready the next scenes. You are an excellent writer. 

on May. 21 2014 at 5:52 pm
AriellaK SILVER, Edison, New Jersey
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I agree. I think this piece is very well written-- definetly top notch-- but there are many other stories that are just as good as this that have no comments at all. 

A.K.-Me SILVER said...
on Apr. 26 2014 at 8:00 am
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Favorite Quote:
A pen is mightier then a sword.

Wow, you really have talent !

on Apr. 23 2014 at 8:23 pm
JohnPaulGeorgeandRingo BRONZE, Scranton, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"There is a prospect greater than the sea and that is the Sky. There is a Prospect greater than the Sky and that is the Human Soul." ~Victor Hugo Les Miserables

I agree, i liked the teenage Opulence memeber and there was no sign of magic untill the last few sentences. I feel it would be better you left it just the way it was headed in the beginning. However It was really good, The beginning had lots of potential for a longer piece and the word choice ws good

JustAThought said...
on Apr. 5 2014 at 9:13 am
To anyone who doesn't know; this article has been rated #1 for about 3 years, I remember seeing it here when I still had an account in 2011. I'm wondering why. Its excellently written, but aren't there more pieces out there that should also receive some recognition? How can anyone else compete with this kind of a rating system? Just a thought-please don't hate.

on Feb. 13 2014 at 2:28 am
Kailuasurfer GOLD, Honolulu, Hawaii
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This is a great story! I feel like you could stretch the ending out, it ended a bit quickly. But other than that, it's a great story!