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The Intruder

January 17, 2024
By Anonymous

In the quiet, stillness of the night, April lay in her bed, wrapped in the comforting embrace of the darkness. The only sounds that echoed through her suburban home were the occasional russell of leaves outside and the soft hum of the refrigerator. April drifted off into a peaceful slumber, with no warning of the soon-to-come unexpected turns of the night.


Around midnight, April was abruptly awakened by a strange noise coming from downstairs. Her eyes widened, and her heart quickened as her imagination began to conjure dreadful scenarios. She strained her ears, attempting to uncover the source of the disturbance. Was it the creaking of the floorboards, a shadowy figure moving stealthily through her home, or just the product of an overactive imagination?


With caution, she descended the staircase, the cold floor sending shivers up her spine.  The only source of light was the swaying illuminations by the moon, blocked by lifeless, decaying trees. As she reached the bottom, she could feel the tension in the air, her senses heightened. Anxiety clawed at her as she surveyed the darkened living room, searching for any signs of an intruder.


Just as fear began to tighten its grip on her, a soft whimper reached her ears. Confused, April followed the sound to the sliding glass door leading to the backyard. There, in the dim moonlight, stood her loyal companion, Bengy, wagging his tail with eager anticipation. 


With a chuckle, April opened the door, and Bengy darted out into the night. The cool breeze ruffled his fur as he scampered around the yard. His joy was evident in every playful movement. April couldn’t help but smile at the innocence of her furry companion, who had unwittingly caused her heart to race with fear. 


As she stood there, watching Bengy revel in the moonlit night, April couldn’t shake the lingering adrenaline from her brief encounter with imagined danger. It was a night she would remember, not for the fear that had momentarily gripped her, but for the realization that sometimes, even in the stillness of the night, the source of our fears can turn out to be nothing more than a furry friend seeking a little midnight adventure. 


The author's comments:

This piece incorporates several stylistic devices to create a vivid and engaging narrative. Imagery was used to paint a clear picture in the reader’s mind. These detailed phrases help create a sensory experience and introduce a specific atmosphere. The pacing was another device in the story that was controlled to build tension during April’s descent downstairs and then release it with the revelation about the dog. This piece includes symbolism as well. The dog, Bengy, serves as a symbol of innocence and loyalty. His actions contrast with April’s initial fear, helping to highlight the final theme in the story. 


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