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Inhale, exhale.

February 8, 2010
By shaddlovesyou BRONZE, Newtown, Pennsylvania
shaddlovesyou BRONZE, Newtown, Pennsylvania
3 articles 3 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"That's why I write, because life never works except in retrospect. You can't control life, at least you can control your version." - Chuck Palahniuk


"One pill makes you larger, and one pill makes you small," the music in the background was low and somber like a tribal hymn. Johnny was on cloud nine that night. "And the ones that mother gives you don't do anything at all," the memories started coming back, one line at a time, "Go ask Alice, when she's ten feet tall."

"I remember when you belonged to me, Johnny! We used to be better than this, you used to be better than this!" I screamed out loud to him.

The music was still playing, picking up tempo. "When the men on the chessboard get up and tell you where to go..." Puff. "And you've just had some kind of mushroom, and your mind is moving slow..." Puff. "Go ask Alice, I think she'll know..." Pass.

Alice always knows. She always did, she always will. Fighting this battle I'll never win. "Johnny," whimpering now, "I remember when you belonged to me, and not the girls we call Ecstasy and LSD."

"...Remember what the Dormouse said..." The music fades out, along with the better half of my mind. Inhale... exhale. Watching the smoke dance on the ceiling, this is our last song. Inhale... exhale.

"You could've belonged to me if you wanted too... they make take you place I never can, but..." Inhale, exhale. Que dizziness and a series of blacking out. "Remember what the Dormouse said." Fade out, end the scene. Tell me this isn't my life. Inhale, exhale.

The author's comments:
"White Rabbit" by Jefferson Airplane came on one day while in class and triggered some feelings, and here we are. This is the building block for a much larger piece that is being worked on as I type this.

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Emmers BRONZE said...
on Feb. 17 2010 at 8:01 pm
Emmers BRONZE, Washoe Valley, Nevada
2 articles 1 photo 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had." Gary Jules

when you finish the whole thing, let me know, it was great and id love to read the rest.

IamAdoctor said...
on Feb. 13 2010 at 12:28 am
Write that piece. Do it.

on Feb. 11 2010 at 8:51 pm
DallysGrrl PLATINUM, Middlesex, New Jersey
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No problem. When i c talent that no one has commented on and i realize how awesome their writing is i cant help but comment!

on Feb. 11 2010 at 8:49 pm
shaddlovesyou BRONZE, Newtown, Pennsylvania
3 articles 3 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"That's why I write, because life never works except in retrospect. You can't control life, at least you can control your version." - Chuck Palahniuk

Thanks so much for your feedback, I really appreciate it. (:

on Feb. 11 2010 at 8:36 pm
DallysGrrl PLATINUM, Middlesex, New Jersey
20 articles 0 photos 199 comments
This article is amazing!!!! awesome and imaginative!!!! it was short but powerful!!!! great job!!!! HOME RUN. TOUCHDOWN. GOAL.