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A deep Secret

September 23, 2009
By JustAGirlNextDoor SILVER, Peachland, North Carolina
JustAGirlNextDoor SILVER, Peachland, North Carolina
5 articles 6 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
I think my favorite quote is
"Would you rather me tell you the truth and make you sad or lie and make you happy".


I brushed a strand of hair from my face and looked at my watch ,it was 5:20 and soccer practice started at 5:30.
I looked at the parking lot and saw cars coming in.
I turned and ran to my dad. "Kids are coming now Dad".
My dad nodded his head then said to me, "Go ahead and take out the soccer balls".
I ran to do what he said when I saw a hot red truck park into the parking lot. I turned the oppisite direction and quickly grabbed the soccer balls.
"Here you go" I muttered. I guessed I looked as strained as I felt because my dad took one look at me and asked me "Leah are you alright".
I shook my head yes "I'm fine I...I was just taken by surprise by something--what would you like me to do" I added.
"All the kids are lined up so just toss the the ball and let them kick it into the goal".
I nodded and ran back to the field. I smiled at all the six and seven year olds.
"Hey everybody ya'll ready to kick some soccer balls?" I asked.
The little kids shook there heads yes and lined up, I looked around. "Does anybody know where Andy is?"
The kids shook there heads no when I saw him coming.
I waved my hand "Hey Andy" I called. Six year old Andy Wright came running up to me.
"Hey Leah" he said shyly. I bent down and he gave me a high five "Are you ready for soccer Andy". He shook his head yes.
"Well then" I said in a british accent "You best get yor' little bahootie in the back of the line".
He giggled and ran to the back of the line. I laughed silently and stood up.
I stiffened immediately as I saw a couple sit on the grass right by the field.
I turned my back on them and started tossing the ball to the kids.
Now you might be wondering why I was acting rude, why I was at soccer practice, and most of all who I was.

My name is Leah Black and I am seventeen years old, I am 5'4 and skinny. My hair is deep black and my eyes are ( as some people say) lightning blue, whatever that is.
My dad is a soccer coach for the six and seven year olds. I had been playing soccer for five years and decided to have a break and be an assistance coach.
The couple I had just ignored was some people I knew. There names were Jacob Wright and Madaline Mitchell.
To make a long story short I knew Jacob from soccer and I have had a big crush on him since my first year of soccer.
He wasn't a popular kid but everybody loved him. He was a 6 foot soccer player.
With short, and little spiky, black hair and warm brown eyes.
He had a smile for everybody and just being around him made you warm up... like your on personnal sun.
Anyway the witch--I mean girl with him is what everybody would say was my rival.
Madaline Mitchell, for some reason has hated me ever since I had moved to North Carolina. I never figured out why but the school rumor was that she was jealous of me, don't know why but thats what I heard.
Anyway I had ten years of practice to hide my feelings from people so I didn't suspect anybody to know my true feelings for Jacob.
At any other time I probably would have gone over to say hi to them (Just to be around Jacob).
But unfortunently I was still mad at him for some trick he played on me.
I would have kept on with these thoughts but at that moment something hit me on the head and I blacked out
( To be continued)

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on Feb. 15 2012 at 1:34 pm
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i must know what happens next

on Jan. 2 2012 at 3:59 am
UnwantedNinja GOLD, Pretoria, Other
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Give me more !!!!!

NKsunshine said...
on Oct. 28 2011 at 8:42 pm
This is good, I'd like to read the second part, keep writing(:

on Oct. 28 2011 at 8:26 pm
Imperfectlife SILVER, Rochester, New York
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I would like to read more, it's good.


on Oct. 6 2011 at 7:52 pm
austenite77 GOLD, Appleton, Wisconsin
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I agree, I your a good writer, but you're jumping in the middle of the story to fast. I'd like to read the next part

on Sep. 14 2011 at 12:34 am
booklover104 BRONZE, Stockton, California
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I have a couple of quotes i like... \"Success is not a doorway it\'s a staircase\"
2. \"Everything happens for a reason\"
3.\"Your worth consists in what you are and not in what you have\"-Thomas Edison

intriguing! =)

on Aug. 23 2011 at 9:13 am
russianreader BRONZE, Charlotte, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
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This is pretty good, but it seems really rough and kind of jumbled to read.

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on May. 27 2011 at 1:05 pm
KellyR GOLD, Richmond, Virginia
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I would slow down a bit! You have a good idea going here, but I think it needs details.

on Apr. 13 2011 at 10:52 pm
TheEclecticist BRONZE, Rhodes, Georgia
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I like :) I can't wait to
And my boyfriend is a 6 ft soccer player so that makes this just that much better ;)

Sha Cha said...
on Apr. 13 2011 at 7:25 am
Love it...but where's the continuation.Can't wait

on Mar. 26 2011 at 2:24 pm
JustAGirlNextDoor SILVER, Peachland, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
I think my favorite quote is
"Would you rather me tell you the truth and make you sad or lie and make you happy".

Thanks so much :) I really appreciate it

ace1897 SILVER said...
on Mar. 22 2011 at 10:04 am
ace1897 SILVER, Pellston, Michigan
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i absolutely am in love with your writing style! you are great!

on Feb. 28 2011 at 8:49 pm
whateverjuliet BRONZE, Miami, Florida
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this storY beggining is realy good!! and very eye catching! and writingloverforever ill check out your story too! can yOU  guys check my poem out? its called superman , thanx!

on Feb. 6 2011 at 7:51 pm
JustAGirlNextDoor SILVER, Peachland, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
I think my favorite quote is
"Would you rather me tell you the truth and make you sad or lie and make you happy".

Thanks! I'll take a look at your story.

on Feb. 6 2011 at 5:31 pm
WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
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A great beginning to a story. I'm excited to read more. I'm in the process of writing a romance story myself. Could you check it out maybe? It's titled "When Love Happens" and I have posted the prologue and chapter one so far.

on Dec. 24 2010 at 10:33 am
m.ashley92 SILVER, Memphis, Tennessee
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it was an interesting story; really well written, but some of the writing seemed exactly like twilight

on Dec. 2 2010 at 9:48 pm
Gracious PLATINUM, Go Away, Kansas
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well written till te end. I dont think i didnt notice the stuff you stole from twilight in there!

on Sep. 6 2010 at 1:38 pm
JustAGirlNextDoor SILVER, Peachland, North Carolina
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thanks so much i already posted the next and everyon is asking for i'll try to post it soon

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on Sep. 5 2010 at 7:14 pm
-Annie- BRONZE, Greenville, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
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I loved it the story line -- but next time try and go with the flow a little more, you know? Just write, let the words form from your mind. That always helps! But I really, really liked it, and loved the cliff-hanger ending. ;D Add the next one soon. =]]