Your grammar could be better, you could have added a bit more detail, and there could have been more of a magic to this story. Other than that, I love your idea of something thats so opposite of what media, movies, and books present: the girl falls for the guy who's her best friend and who was always in love with her from the start. It was a great start and brainstorm. I think I would like to see maybe a revised, more vivid version of this. This seemed to be more of an outline than the final draft. What I do, is I like to write mine down on paper and pencil a few times, look it over, then copy what I've got onto the website.