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Eyes of a monster

July 26, 2012
By country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
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country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
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His eyes peer down at me, looking at my body inch by inch. An evil grin spreads across his ugly old ragged face showing his yellow bright teeth. My hands were tide down on the chair, I tried to move them but it’s no use. “You cant do this to me, you’re an heartless man and I hate you.” I spat at him. “What do you even want with me?” His grin turns sour. He raised his hand and slapped me across the face with hard force. “You little stuck up brat. Shut up before I really hurt you.” Tears started to form falling from my sky ocean blue eyes. I turned my face away from him, I couldn’t stand looking in the eyes of a monster. He grabbed my cheeks hard and turned my face so I am looking into his evil heartless eyes. “ I am not done with you yet. Your father killed my family and now I am going to kill his.” He said with a big laugh. I took a big gulp cause now I am really scared. He walked away and vanished into the darkness leaving me alone. I closed my eyes wishing I was home now watching twilight and laughing with my family but I guess that will never happen now. I heard a noise and two seconds later he came back with a big knife. “Got any last words?” He asked me. I stared at the floor for a while then looked back up at him.” Yes I do, go die in hell.”

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Zoya_Khan GOLD said...
on Dec. 31 2012 at 3:40 pm
Zoya_Khan GOLD, Gujranwala, Other
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Where LOGIC ends, FAITH begins.
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I really like it... It's short but AWESOME :) :) :) Keep writing!!!
Opticalillusion DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 29 2012 at 12:21 pm
Opticalillusion DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
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I am an artist bound only for the poet's glory....But only achieve half of the success that my dreams aspire to find, And to what do the whispers tell me of this failure...To what end to they haunt my nightmares...my eternal dark dreams...

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i loved it, i agree with polar-icecap with the background info maybe u can make like a prequil or somthing and after that make another chapter keep the story going but this is a great story im glad this isnt a love story u did good going away from the usual teen topics :D so overall great job, keep up the good work  and maybe one day me and you can write another chapter to this togther :Di would love to help you it seems like it would make a great book :D
PurpOreos SILVER said...
on Aug. 3 2012 at 12:36 pm
PurpOreos SILVER, Macomb, Michigan
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Are u kidding me!? This is Freakin AWESOME!! Great description on the man. Really enjoyed this and I see why u chose that pitcure it represents the girl. Great job! Keep writting Please!
DanielM SILVER said...
on Aug. 3 2012 at 12:34 pm
DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
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"I would rather hated million times for what i did then loved a million times for what i didn't do." - Daniel Moto
" I've sought out to be the best i could posibly be but when i hit a roadblock in life what did i do, i had two choices either stay at the roadblock or i take this roadblock and make of it and go around it and achieve my goal. So, what will it be?"- Daniel Mathia

"People take love like its a four letter word or just a phrase that you tell people or your friends all the time. But in reality love is much bigger than a merely phrase or 4 letter word. Instead love is a genuine promise or covenant to that special person."-Daniel Mathia

“Why change yourself when you were made perfect and wonderfully by the creator of everything?” – Daniel Mathia

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This was a really good. The.beginning caught my attention. It's so eerie and keeps me on suspene that my mind was racing so fast when I read this great job!
polar-icecap DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 31 2012 at 9:56 am
polar-icecap DIAMOND, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
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I loved your story. I'd like a little more backround information, but even without it, the story is fantastic! And the last words, what a great way to end a story such as this. I loved it. And I hope to hear more from you