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Dead Weight MAG

September 27, 2012
By xMIRandax SILVER, Ellicott City, Maryland
xMIRandax SILVER, Ellicott City, Maryland
8 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm gonna' make you feel like a zoo plankton goin' up against Shamu!"~ Blue & Clam

The empty country road was left unprotected from the sun, and the young woman’s arms and legs – exposed in a tank top and short-shorts – were bronzed to a deep gold.

Hearing the rumble of an engine, she turned to see an old pickup truck appear at the top of the hill, a man who looked to be in his late thirties behind the wheel.

Grinning, she allowed her backpack to thump to the ground as she casually held out one arm, turning her thumb up to the sky, as if she had done the exact same thing dozens of times before.

The man stopped, as they always did when they caught sight of her scantily clad body shining in the sunlight. As he reached over to open the passenger door for her, the woman leaned down to pick up the dead weight of her backpack.

She slid easily into the truck, and almost immediately the key was pulled out of the ignition and the locks on the doors clicked.

One hand still resting on the lock button, the woman dropped the keys by her feet and slipped something out of her pocket that flashed sharp and silver in the sun.

Smiling dangerously, she leaned closer to the man, who had yet to notice what she was holding.

“Thanks for stopping.”

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on Sep. 21 2015 at 8:42 am
KayeIsWriting SILVER, Oxford, Alabama
9 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only thing we have to fear is fear itself!" - Franklin Roosevelt

5 stars for real! But I only have one question...What was in the bag to cause it to have "dead weight"? Was it just the knife? The inference I drew from the title and there being a bag, was that there would be something in the bag that was dead and the trucker would be next in the bag.

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on Jul. 24 2014 at 3:28 am
AshhKel BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
4 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We can't help everyone, but everyone can help someone." - Ronald Reagan

I was expecting a totally different ending and you made an incredible plot twist. This was so, so amazing! 

on Jan. 7 2014 at 9:52 pm
ik right i thought she was gonna die

on Jul. 7 2013 at 8:28 pm
MorningStar921 PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They made their own choice. They chose family. And, well... isn't that kinda the whole point? No doubt - endings are hard. But then again... nothing ever really ends, does it?"
--Chuck, 'Supernatural' Episode 522

This was amazing! I wasn't expecting the lady to pull a knife out of her bag! Keep up the good work

on Dec. 15 2012 at 7:26 pm
AlwaysAntlers SILVER, Kingsport, Tennessee
5 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Don't forget - no one else sees the world the way you do, so no one else can tell the stories that you have to tell.”
― Charles de Lint, (from his book,The Blue Girl)

Haha, when I started reading it, I thought she was going to get murdered. This was really good, and I loved the ending!

on Oct. 9 2012 at 1:58 pm
Savannainthesky GOLD, West Suffield, Connecticut
11 articles 0 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It may have been in pieces.. but I gave you the best of me"-Jim Morrison(the doors)

I read this in the latest issue and fell in love with it! so good!!!!! sent chills down my back. 5 stars!!! :)