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Hand in Hand

August 11, 2009
By PK4evr ELITE, Allen, Texas
PK4evr ELITE, Allen, Texas
105 articles 5 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make grape juice, then watch everyone wonder how you did it!


Hand in hand
We walk through the meadow
Hand in hand
We trudge through morning dew
Hand in hand

We smile at each other
Hand in hand
My heart wants no other
Hand in hand
I feel so warm
Hand in hand
I’m definitely not forlorn
Hand in hand
My mind loses focus
Hand in hand
My feet don’t focus
Hand in hand
I stumble and fall
Hand in hand
You bear the weight of it all
Hand in hand
You gently lift me
Hand in hand
You decided to save me
Hand in hand
We keep walking
Hand in hand
We talk and start laughing
Hand in hand
My heart feels light
Hand in hand
My smile is so bright
As hand in hand
We walk through the meadow
Hand in hand
We trudge through morning dew
Hand in hand

The author's comments:
Something I saw in a dream... :). But still beautiful I hope!

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EdytD SILVER said...
on Aug. 26 2009 at 12:36 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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This is very interesting! I like the repetitiveness, but I think that it makes it a bit monotonous. Perhaps if you wrote "hand in hand" for every three lines, it might flow better, and will still keep the idea of them walking together. I think you could also make a simile/metaphor out of the bright smile and morning dew, or give it strong imagery, so that the reader can almost feel as though they are the person smiling, walking, with their boyfriend in the morning. I really like the idea, however, and definitely think that it is beautiful. Great job!