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The Roller Coaster MAG

By Anonymous

   

I step into the car

a stomach flutter

a thought of regret

The bar comes down with a thud



The climb starts its way

creaking and climbing

bemoaning our fates

"I want to get off!" my whole being screams



Over the hill we go with a crack and a whoosh

accelerating

speeding

sliding

slipping

and rushing



clattering and

clunking.

and then rest,



Tick - tick - tick-



The climb starts again

a heart flutter

and a whistle

and in one breath we dive



into the curve -

whirling

whipping

winding

and back down



The wheels start grinding and turning

a gasp and



Brake

We stop

It's over



- and back into line ...





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its ok abit bleak

on May. 6 2017 at 12:18 pm
HereSheIs BRONZE, Wellesley, Massachusetts
3 articles 0 photos 187 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We can easily forgive a child who is afraid of the dark; the real tragedy of life is when men are afraid of the light." -Plato

You have perfectly captured the roller coaster feeling

on Apr. 7 2015 at 2:39 pm
Great use of action verbs. I really liked this.

on Nov. 7 2014 at 8:35 am
Brian110 SILVER, Jonesport, Maine
8 articles 1 photo 79 comments

Favorite Quote:
if life gives you lemons..... squeeze them back in life's eyes!

The ending realy rapped the whole thing up and showed how the terifiying thrill of a rolercoaster is scarry but that thrill just drives you back for more.

Logan said...
on Mar. 11 2013 at 10:19 am
Nice job!!

Malanie GOLD said...
on Nov. 1 2012 at 8:39 am
Malanie GOLD, Blacklick, Ohio
16 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I care not what others think of what I do, but I care very much about what I think of what I do! That is character!” ~ Theodore Roosevelt

Wow, this captures what it's like to ride the lovely rollercoasters. I love this poem.

simple reply said...
on Sep. 14 2011 at 10:16 pm
I loved it keep up da great wrk boo

on Mar. 23 2011 at 1:17 pm
i think it wasnt so grand and i couldve done a more awesumer job...duh

Bueno said...
on Apr. 4 2010 at 7:23 pm
Bueno.  Barnstable.  Barnstubble.  Stubbly Cape Cod.  Bueno!  Stubble bathroom sink paper cup flush toilet shaving cream shallow wet plastic shower bueno!

jobajfnh said...
on Jan. 15 2009 at 6:52 pm
its ok abit bleak

dgxxv said...
on Dec. 4 2008 at 4:02 pm
i like men