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A Race Through Space

March 22, 2012
By bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today." - Neil deGrasse Tyson


young boy looks up in the sky
young boy heaves a sigh
no stars tonight
the city blocks the light
of parents above
the celestial doves

the beauty of the skies cannot bleed
its white beads
into the sky
and up high
galaxies the size of crumbs dance
and prance
across the infinite black sea
little stars tinier than a pea
it's space
a wonderful place

mercury, venus, earth and mars
jupiter, saturn, uranus, neptune and stars
the teaching stops there
that's an ugly affair
there's more to see
which causes glee

a black hole ravenously feasts on a star
a supergiant explodes as if bizarre
bubbles of gamma-rays gigantic and cute
rainbow-colored magnificient nebulae growing fruit
to become the stars
to create planets like ours

imagine a world with pink oceans and red lands
how about another home to only green sands
or maybe a frigid small world full of ice
perhaps there's a hot gas giant that isn't nice
as it closely orbits its parent
the errant
occurs as the child evaporates under the power
of the mother glower

space is a wonder
its not a blunder
its meant to be
the wonders to see
and while you may not see the sky
up high
remember the final frontier
and give a celestial cheer


The author's comments:
I wrote this piece because I felt I wanted to explain the wonders of our universe in a magical poem. In school, the solar system is only taught. By writing this poem, I felt I could show space outside of the solar system itself.

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on Apr. 19 2012 at 10:21 am
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today." - Neil deGrasse Tyson

Thanks! 

teamo14 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 19 2012 at 10:20 am
teamo14 BRONZE, Paris, Other
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great writing, I like your idea. :)

on Apr. 18 2012 at 10:44 pm
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today." - Neil deGrasse Tyson

Thanks so much for the feedback, LaurenL!

on Apr. 18 2012 at 10:42 pm
LaurenL. SILVER, Alpha, New Jersey
6 articles 1 photo 5 comments
This is great! I love all the detail and all together it's very well written! (:

on Apr. 18 2012 at 11:22 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Oh yeah sure! Your poem was fantastic!

on Apr. 18 2012 at 11:22 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Oh yeah sure! Your poem was fantastic!

on Apr. 18 2012 at 11:19 am
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today." - Neil deGrasse Tyson

Thanks so much for the feedback!

on Apr. 18 2012 at 11:17 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Man, I wish I had a telescope! Makes me wish I could see the stars every night. This was such a fascinating read! I loved every word. The imagery, word chioce, message...everything:)

on Apr. 18 2012 at 10:53 am
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today." - Neil deGrasse Tyson

Thanks Josika.Nav!

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 18 2012 at 10:52 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey! this is awesome. beautiful language. the poem flows well ....although at one point it gets too caught up in its rhyme scheme and seems forced. but other than that, great work and keep writing XD

on Apr. 17 2012 at 8:11 pm
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today." - Neil deGrasse Tyson

Thank you!!

on Apr. 17 2012 at 8:09 pm
The_Real_ArielNever_Died PLATINUM, Boston, Massachusetts
21 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To love me is a ticket to hate " - Myself

i love the last stanza so much !! <3

it's so vivid and your wording is ,whoa !


on Apr. 17 2012 at 8:08 pm
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today." - Neil deGrasse Tyson

I wanted to post that this poem received honorable mention at my local library's poetry contest!

on Apr. 16 2012 at 6:47 pm
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today." - Neil deGrasse Tyson

Thanks so much!

on Apr. 16 2012 at 6:09 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

First off, I want to commend you on the originality and impact of your overall idea. The imagery was great, rhyme scheme successful, etc. In a nutshell, keep doin' what your doin' and you'll be pretty great.

on Apr. 16 2012 at 11:31 am
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today." - Neil deGrasse Tyson

Thanks so much! I definitely wanted to put everything about space not learned in school. There's so much more than what is taught in school. 

Taconut7 GOLD said...
on Apr. 16 2012 at 11:28 am
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me

"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid." - Albert Einstein

Wow! I really loved the imagery and similies/metaphors you have here!!!! GREAT JOB!! (Btw: I think I learned more about space in this poem then out of all those years in school!)