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All Those Daisies

August 7, 2012
By so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."


Daisies torn from the ground.
He loves me, he loves me not.
Petals ripped from their stem.
He loves me, he loves me not.
Daisies captured by the dozen.
I love him, I love him not.
Petals plucked off silently, quickly.
I love him, I love him not.
Fields of daisies gone.
He loves me, he loves me not.
Petals in heaps.
He loves me, he loves me not.
Not a daisy in sight.
I love him, I love him not.
Petals drifting in the breeze.
I love him, I love him not.
Everything is gone.
He loves me, he loves me not.
Except my love for him,
The only daisy left in an empty field.
He loves me, he loves me
Not.


The author's comments:
This piece is about a girl being so in love with someone that she ruins something beautiful in order to get an answer from him (the daisies). In the end, she finds out that he doesn't love her after all, which is what the "not" on the last line represents.

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on Nov. 27 2012 at 9:06 pm
ChobaniLuvinPenguin PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
29 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What makes the desert beautiful is that somewhere it hides a well."
― Antoine de Saint-Exupéry, The Little Prince

So beautiful and so creative! It is easy to understand in context, and the deeper meaning behind it really makes you think. You make it seem like there is a somewhat violent side in the plucking of the daisies, and create a character with the desperate voice of your narrator, which is very unique. I love it!!! Truly amazing.

so_joy SILVER said...
on Oct. 23 2012 at 6:37 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you! Mind checking out my poem, Sitting Alone? It would mean a lot.

on Oct. 21 2012 at 6:37 pm
LihuaEmily SILVER, North Kingstown, Rhode Island
7 articles 3 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is said that there's no such thing as a free lunch. But the universe is the ultimate free lunch." -Alan Guth

Raw and sad. I hate when this kind of thing happens. Ha ha, seriously. But this was great. Keep going.

on Oct. 11 2012 at 8:31 am
GraphicWriter DIAMOND, Yuba City, California
63 articles 10 photos 89 comments
I'd love to. In return, could you check out mine? I'd greatly appreciate it. :)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Oct. 10 2012 at 7:04 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you so much!!

so_joy SILVER said...
on Oct. 10 2012 at 7:03 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you! Good idea, I'll try it. Mind checking out my other work?:)

samlynn BRONZE said...
on Oct. 10 2012 at 11:55 am
samlynn BRONZE, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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You are very good at writing poetry, very creative!!!

on Oct. 7 2012 at 6:51 pm
GraphicWriter DIAMOND, Yuba City, California
63 articles 10 photos 89 comments
It's a good poem with an awesome story behind it.. Maybe making different stanzas to show the breaks inbetween? But other than that, it's simply wonderful. :)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Oct. 5 2012 at 11:16 am
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you!

on Oct. 1 2012 at 1:52 pm
i_am_so_very_large_and_towering SILVER, Mililani, Hawaii
5 articles 1 photo 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yet what is any ocean but a multitude of drops?"

this is great:)

sonJaNae said...
on Oct. 1 2012 at 12:41 pm
sonJaNae, Fort Wainwright, Alaska
0 articles 0 photos 68 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No one can change a person, but someone can be a person's reason to change" -Spongebob Squarepants

Sure, I'll take a look :)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 29 2012 at 10:47 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you! Mind checking out my other poems Sitting Alone and Fishbowl?:)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 29 2012 at 10:46 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you SO much! Mind checking out my other poems Sitting Alone and Fishbowl?:)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 29 2012 at 10:46 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Mind checking out my other poems Sitting Alone and Fishbowl?:)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 29 2012 at 9:47 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you!

irishlass317 said...
on Sep. 28 2012 at 10:29 pm
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

This is really good!! The only constructive criticisim I have is that you might make the sayings between the "he loves me.." statements longer, so that the reader can understand the backstory better. Great job!!! :) 

on Sep. 28 2012 at 10:18 pm
satellite23 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
Prove it.

Wow! I think this might be the best thing you've submitted to the site so far. I liked the idea, and how your switch between sentences so often. Also, I really liked the line break at the end, it adds a bit of humor and drama to the piece. Nicely done!

sonJaNae said...
on Sep. 28 2012 at 7:58 pm
sonJaNae, Fort Wainwright, Alaska
0 articles 0 photos 68 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No one can change a person, but someone can be a person's reason to change" -Spongebob Squarepants

I actually really enjoyed this! Usually I find the repetive poems a bit bland, but this was interesting and creative! :)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 28 2012 at 6:35 am
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you!

LunaLives GOLD said...
on Sep. 25 2012 at 1:46 pm
LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
17 articles 0 photos 237 comments

Favorite Quote:
Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne

I like a not love poem every once in a while. Great work!