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Buried Treasure

May 17, 2013
By BekahBoo GOLD, Battle Ground, Washington
BekahBoo GOLD, Battle Ground, Washington
10 articles 4 photos 7 comments

Desperate for attention,
trapped in tension
try to be yourself
act like someone else

inside, screaming in pain
outside, calm and plain
to us, there's nothing wrong
to us, you seem so strong

truly your cracking
and seem to be lacking
but in what?
your mind is shut
your feelings locked away
your skies are all grey
let me turn them back to blue
let me help you

you can't stay buried forever
just like any other treasure
someone will wipe away the dust
wash off the rust
and you will shine
is the job mine?
will you allow me to
rescue you?

I won't even need a treasure map
to get you out of this trap
i’ll just have to break down
the walls you've put around
the ones to keep you safe
but don't allow you to face
or stand up to brutality.

Just let me go on an adventure
to find you, who is buried treasure
and all the world will see
when you stand beside me
that you are priceless
and nothing less.

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This article has 3 comments.

on May. 24 2013 at 12:56 am
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
22 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!

Great message, love the fourth and last stanzas, and nice flow despite a couple hiccups. None of the rhymes seemed forced and the repeated words even sounded good and added to the poem. Good job!

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on May. 22 2013 at 6:41 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Great rhyme and rhythm. And the title. Beautiful. And the messafe. Last line are priceless.

on May. 22 2013 at 6:35 pm
Flowers_Will_Grow SILVER, Annandale, Virginia
8 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A little fall of rain, can hardly hurt me now."-Little Fall of Rain from Les Miserables
"Rain will make the flowers grow."-Little Fall of Rain from Les Miserables
"We'll carry on"-Welcome to the Black Parade from My Chemical Romance

That is so sweet...it resonates within me (although alot of stuff does) but I felt as though it were speaking to me...Great job keep writng! xD