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A Mother's View

May 24, 2013
By gossamergirl GOLD, Nowhere, New Hampshire
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gossamergirl GOLD, Nowhere, New Hampshire
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"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is just to love and be loved in return." ~ Moulin Rouge

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A mother walks in
Into a room
Where her son has slept
Till the afternoon

She looks to the floor
And there she sees
A mess of clothing
And books and games

She looks all about
When she can’t take any more
She starts to get cleaning
A gigantic chore

She wonders in awe
How this room is like this
How such a good boy
Could make such a mess

She looks all around
When she is through
But she knows
Just what he will do

He will go on sleeping
And playing and reading
And leaving all his stuff
For her to clean

© Jessica T., Highland Village, TX

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EmmaClaire0823 GOLD said...
on Dec. 9 2013 at 6:01 pm
EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
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I really like the subject matter. People usually don't think about the mother's point of view and it is creative. It also has a moral. My biggest thing is word choice. I think you could use better vocabulary like instead of sleeping put snoozing (just an example.) Good job overall though.