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Death

June 26, 2013
By GoatGreen GOLD, Boise, Idaho
GoatGreen GOLD, Boise, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
We make a living by what we make, but we make a life by what we give


Death rules over all who fall
Within the clutches
This desk
That wall
The stupid boy who falls
Beneath the stacks
Between the cracks
In the hole
Knee deep, mouth full
Who keeps tearing families apart
Who rips children's hearts
And takes their names to the grave
Be afraid
I own your life
Do as i say
I'll give you light
Perfection is too innocent
Death is an deficit
Love equals hatred
Why don't you look at your reflection
Look at which direction
Where do you go?
Do you even know?
Damnation always shows


The author's comments:
Dark times always show

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GoatGreen GOLD said...
on Sep. 27 2015 at 5:08 pm
GoatGreen GOLD, Boise, Idaho
13 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
We make a living by what we make, but we make a life by what we give

Thank you very much :) most people thought was a bit cheesy but I am glad someone liked it.

GoatGreen GOLD said...
on Jul. 30 2013 at 5:03 pm
GoatGreen GOLD, Boise, Idaho
13 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
We make a living by what we make, but we make a life by what we give

why thank u ^-^

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 9 2013 at 2:06 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

Everything about this is so true. I though it was somewhat amuzsing at first, until you started to convey the deep sadness and emotion of the whole poem. I like the rhymes. And the rhetorical questions add originality to the whole piece as well. My favorite lines are the following: "Perfection is too innocent/ Death is an deficit (I think it should be "a" not "an")/ Love equals hatred". Poignant lines.