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Broken

March 28, 2014
By Carrllyyy_055 BRONZE, Etters, Pennsylvania
Carrllyyy_055 BRONZE, Etters, Pennsylvania
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life begins at the end of your comfort zone."


We used to know this beautiful, smiling girl.

But as she grew, her life started to swirl.

As time passed, she was lead down the wrong path.

If you said one word, you would hear her wrath.

Months went by and she became bone thin.

That smile now a disgusting grin.

Although she is young, she looks much older.

Every puff and sniff makes her heart colder.

Her family just wants back their loving daughter.

She is so lost they can’t seem to spot her.

The once blank slate, is now covered in black ink.

You might look again, you may even blink.

The eyes that were once a pretty hazel,

Are now under critical appraisal.

On the inside she is breaking down.

She feels almost as if she could drown.

She doesn’t take notice to who she is hurting.

This has become quite concerning.

Her clothes do not cover her inked skin.

Everyone hopes there is still light within.

This fragile girl has scars she will never show.

She wishes to be a survivor, you know.


The author's comments:
This poem is very special to me becasue it's talking about my sister and how she has changed so much. My sister is still alive, but to me I feel as if my family and I have lost her.

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on May. 29 2014 at 2:30 pm
Carrllyyy_055 BRONZE, Etters, Pennsylvania
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life begins at the end of your comfort zone."

Thanks so much! Stay tuned for the next one :)

on May. 29 2014 at 2:28 pm
Regoneth SILVER, Ilford, Other
9 articles 1 photo 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Driver picks the music. Shotgun shuts his cake hole.” - Dean Winchester, Supernatural.

This shows so much emotion. This is so good. Kepp writing and I hope she gets better ..... : )

on Apr. 23 2014 at 10:24 pm
Nella.Girl97 BRONZE, Ashland, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 437 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep on dreaming even if it breaks your heart."

I'm so glad! 

on Apr. 23 2014 at 2:28 pm
Carrllyyy_055 BRONZE, Etters, Pennsylvania
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life begins at the end of your comfort zone."

Thank you soo much! She's getting there :)

on Apr. 23 2014 at 2:23 pm
Nella.Girl97 BRONZE, Ashland, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 437 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep on dreaming even if it breaks your heart."

Amazing job! Everything about it went perfect! I love the story format, yet also the rhyming! Great work! You can easily get to 100 views! And this poem also has a sad tone...I hope she is better! *hug*

on Apr. 14 2014 at 2:33 pm
Carrllyyy_055 BRONZE, Etters, Pennsylvania
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life begins at the end of your comfort zone."

I definitley will, thank you for reading it! :)

on Apr. 14 2014 at 2:33 pm
Carrllyyy_055 BRONZE, Etters, Pennsylvania
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life begins at the end of your comfort zone."

Thank you so much! :)

TheUniverse said...
on Apr. 14 2014 at 2:32 pm
TheUniverse, Everywhere,, Other
0 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
Exercise to stimulate, not to annihilate. The world wasn't formed in a day, and neither were we. Set small goals and build upon them.

Its very good... The story and rhythm are amazing...  Keep up the great writing!!!!

on Apr. 14 2014 at 2:28 pm
Nerdydragon SILVER, Wichita, Kansas
9 articles 14 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Demons run when a good man goes to war
Night will fall and drown the sun
When a good man goes to war

Friendship dies and true love lies
Night will fall and the dark will rise
When a good man goes to war

Demons run, but count the cost
The battle's won, but the child is lost”
― Steven Moffat

Wow.... very nice.... This relates to me... Keep it up sweetie!

on Apr. 7 2014 at 2:38 pm
Carrllyyy_055 BRONZE, Etters, Pennsylvania
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life begins at the end of your comfort zone."

Thank you so much, it means a lot to me!

on Apr. 7 2014 at 2:36 pm
iimoeloveii GOLD, Augusta, Georgia
14 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
IF YOU CAN'T HANG THEN THERE'S THE DOOR-SLEEPING WITH SIRENS

Nice keep up the great work