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Free me

October 15, 2014
By EttieGH GOLD, Mbabane, Other
EttieGH GOLD, Mbabane, Other
15 articles 2 photos 46 comments

"Freedom." I whispered in a laboured breath,

Free me from the chains of death


Free me from my daily pain

Free me from this hateful bane.


Love, I thought with tearful eyes

Love me where my body lies


Love me through my numbered days

Love me in the usual ways.


Peace, I prayed through sweat and tears

Find peace because I made it all these years


Find peace when I shut my eyes

Find peace when my body dies.


"Freedom." I whispered in a laboured breath,

Free me from the chains of death.

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This article has 6 comments.

EttieGH GOLD said...
on Mar. 10 2015 at 2:11 am
EttieGH GOLD, Mbabane, Other
15 articles 2 photos 46 comments
Thanks, That's great. I was hoping it would hit the spot.

Beila BRONZE said...
on Mar. 6 2015 at 1:10 am
Beila BRONZE, Palo Alto, California
3 articles 0 photos 516 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The coldest winter I ever spent was a summer in San Francisco." -Mark Twain

This poem is stripped down and raw, a very unique piece that slammed me in the chest with a tornado of explosive emotions. The rhyme feels natural and works well. By the way, I love the TFIOS "numbered days" reference. :)

on Mar. 5 2015 at 3:37 am
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

I agree with Casey- organized very well and does not diverge from its topic. This is very well done and shows true potential.

on Feb. 1 2015 at 11:19 pm
CaseyChickenWang SILVER, McDonough,
7 articles 2 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No one likes half-jinglers! Jingle all the way!" - Shelley McNeight
"You don't get what you deserve, you get what you negotiate." - GSUMUN

Love love the organization of this poem. So much emphasis on the elements of freedom 5/5

on Jan. 28 2015 at 8:26 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
29 articles 0 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

Freedom is the mother of needs. I love the scheme here.

on Jan. 25 2015 at 2:38 pm
teacuppoetry GOLD, Lancashire, Other
15 articles 1 photo 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
The world is full of obvious things which nobody by any chance ever observes- Sherlock Holmes

This is a very poignant expression of internal struggle and death