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A Cliche

December 30, 2008
By ayaman PLATINUM, Tenafly, New Jersey
ayaman PLATINUM, Tenafly, New Jersey
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I know, it’s considered
A cliché type of thing
To make a rose
A symbol for love

But I always thought
That’s just it
A beautiful thing
So powerful
So minute
One concept
In one object

It has many layers
A foundation

It has thorns
Of course
There are negatives
All you want
Is to capture
To hold
That one small
So delicate

You take it
In your hands
And then you see
You feel
For the first time
And the second
And the third
It will hurt you
You will bleed

And maybe
Maybe you’ll learn
Maybe you’ll hold it
Next time

But always
Every time
You’ll feel the thorns
You’ll see the beauty
You’ll have it in your hands
But it will hurt you

If you care enough
If you want it
You won’t mind
The thorns

The author's comments:
I know it's a cliche, but sometimes they're just so accurate...

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BMMSMW said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:04 am
a rose reminds me of love and Mr. Wilson cant get a girlfriend! hahahaha:)

and i also think that the picture doesnt make any sense, i think it should b a rose<3

desi95 said...
on Feb. 17 2010 at 7:56 pm
desi95, Tallahasee, Florida
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this is so perfect.....and so true... you captured the meaning of a rose and i can really visualize what you mean

i love it!!!

on Dec. 22 2009 at 10:16 am
music_lover PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
MY quote: "Without music, life would be absolutely pointless.... Music is my life and it always will be!"

Oh my... This is soooo deep. I really like this! It is sooooo true for ANY relationship. Whether it is your friends, family, or sole mate. This explains it all. Good job! Please keep writing.

on Dec. 14 2009 at 11:34 am
Gracie Fojtik SILVER, Park City, Utah
7 articles 0 photos 5 comments
This is so sweet and the words you out in to it made it the oppesset of a cliche I love this!

on Dec. 1 2009 at 11:40 am
OnceForgotten BRONZE, Rockport, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Always be yourself even if you think yourself isn't good enough"-my mother

You have captured "Love" in a very delicate and beautiful way...good job!

on Aug. 3 2009 at 5:54 pm
blackamethyst GOLD, Centerville, Ohio
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I love it. Amazing.

Ryan M. said...
on May. 29 2009 at 10:30 pm
this is really good and really powerful. I love this kinda of poetry it has such great flow and depth. Keep up the good work

on May. 5 2009 at 1:56 pm
Solo_Artist09 BRONZE, St.louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"You can never cross the ocean unless you have the courage to lose sight of the shore." - Christopher Columbus "The most exhausting thing in life is being insincere." "Never apologize for showing feelings cause when you do you apologize for the truth"

omg this is like my fav. i really like this and now every time i see a rose im going to think of this poem. this is really a good poem.

on May. 1 2009 at 2:00 am
Dean Hicks BRONZE, Austin, Texas
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Great metaphor. I have never really thought of a rose as being such an accurate symbol for love. I wonder, is this how the thorn came to represent love in the first place? By the way I'd appreciate it if you check out my poem, Palmer's Peak. Any input would be greatly appreciated.

on Apr. 21 2009 at 1:04 pm
Sarah Dehays BRONZE, Amman, Other
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Woow wonderful!!

on Apr. 19 2009 at 2:34 am
that was so beautiful!!!!!!!!!! I took it like it was a warning to ppl to be careful to what you have, because even the sweeest thing in the world can be hurt, or has her/his negative or touchy points. But the way at the end that you said that you won't mind the pain if you want it enough is the dearest thing ever. Definitly true love. You've given the cliche more depth and meaning. I'v read so many poems, but this was defintly the best. Plz tell me what you think about my work! :)

on Apr. 16 2009 at 4:01 am
jennnnnnn BRONZE, Irvine, California
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this is brilliant. love is a really difficult topic to write about, but you definitely captured it well with the metaphor. thanks for sharing this! (:

on Apr. 16 2009 at 1:47 am
Hillary Shepheard BRONZE, Fort Worth, Texas
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AMAZING metaphor.

on Apr. 12 2009 at 9:26 pm
Winter123 SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
6 articles 1 photo 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Ain't no passin' craze. "

the part about the thorns was really deep. thumbs up

on Apr. 8 2009 at 1:04 am
Caroline Klidonas SILVER, York, Pennsylvania
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awesome metaphor.

scrperson91 said...
on Apr. 6 2009 at 10:27 pm
wowwwwza tht was the most beatiful thing i think i hav evr!! read...i luv it and i cant get enough...keep writing hon!!

ZoeR. GOLD said...
on Apr. 5 2009 at 10:35 pm
ZoeR. GOLD, Redlands, California
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this poem is a great exploration of this classic cliche. I can really relate to the part about the thorns. i have felt the thorn of love way more times then i would like. ****

on Apr. 2 2009 at 12:18 am
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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you are so right, i think that this was a pretty poem lol really,;)

~Peace, Love, and Happiness~

on Mar. 29 2009 at 2:22 am
xXTearsxOfxLunaXx BRONZE, Longmont, Colorado
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Cliches are under-appreciated. This was such a good poem! Nice word choice. It alamost made me cry, just thinking about my life. Plus, roses are my favorite flower. You rock, keep it up!

on Mar. 26 2009 at 11:58 pm
meaghan demallie SILVER, Jamison, Pennsylvania
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