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A Cliche

December 30, 2008
By ayaman PLATINUM, Tenafly, New Jersey
ayaman PLATINUM, Tenafly, New Jersey
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I know, it’s considered
A cliché type of thing
To make a rose
A symbol for love

But I always thought
That’s just it
A beautiful thing
So powerful
So minute
One concept
In one object

It has many layers
A foundation

It has thorns
Of course
There are negatives
All you want
Is to capture
To hold
That one small
So delicate

You take it
In your hands
And then you see
You feel
For the first time
And the second
And the third
It will hurt you
You will bleed

And maybe
Maybe you’ll learn
Maybe you’ll hold it
Next time

But always
Every time
You’ll feel the thorns
You’ll see the beauty
You’ll have it in your hands
But it will hurt you

If you care enough
If you want it
You won’t mind
The thorns

The author's comments:
I know it's a cliche, but sometimes they're just so accurate...

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EdytD SILVER said...
on Mar. 25 2009 at 10:54 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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i like how you say it's a cliche, but still manage to write an original poem talking about the cliche - it definitely doesn't seem easy! i don't think it's long at all; i like the descriptive words - definitely my style! i also like the repetition to emphasize the points. good job! if you want to check out my poem, the link is: TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/91407/A-Lonely-Rain/. thanks, and keep it up! :D

on Mar. 25 2009 at 2:08 am
yael krifcher BRONZE, Potomac, Maryland
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yaa well this was good but...its still a cliche! everything you wrote about it was still cliche! plus a little repetitive, not all around my favorite poem

on Mar. 25 2009 at 2:01 am
followyourheart BRONZE, Shelbyville, Illinois
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that is amazing so much on one topic.i love it!

lilly BRONZE said...
on Mar. 23 2009 at 5:01 pm
lilly BRONZE, Burleson, Texas
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I like ur proem it's wonderful!!!!

on Mar. 19 2009 at 11:03 pm
blubryblsm501, Metuchen, New Jersey
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mint. this peaice of work was outstanding. enough said.

on Mar. 16 2009 at 5:37 pm
lena_monrose BRONZE, Norwalk, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
the onyl way out is through

amazing. I like the imagery. 5 stars:)

on Feb. 25 2009 at 12:43 am
iheartvolleyball, North Jersey, New Jersey
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i really liked how you took a common symbol and gave it a fresh new look. great job =]

FallenPoet89 said...
on Feb. 24 2009 at 2:53 am
Good writing makes you think, I like that about a poem , keep on writing gurl-

on Feb. 23 2009 at 4:20 am
Monica Boles BRONZE, Foster City, California
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Really a gorgeous poem. I love the concept. I find the end a bit long but editing it would probably loose it's beauty.

on Feb. 23 2009 at 3:22 am
Alexxxandra77 BRONZE, Hinton, Other
3 articles 1 photo 4 comments
i love love love love this poem.

its so true.

great work!!

on Feb. 19 2009 at 4:58 am
writingis4ever PLATINUM, Calabasas, California
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great poem! i loved it!

on Feb. 19 2009 at 4:27 am
Katherine Fazio BRONZE, North Andover, Massachusetts
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Absolutely, without doubt, this is the most strikingly beautiful poem I've read in a long time.

lO_oveJay GOLD said...
on Feb. 19 2009 at 12:58 am
lO_oveJay GOLD, Rock Hill, South Carolina
18 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
If everything seems under control, you're not going fast enough.

before reading this poem, i was not fond of roses in any way because they were sucha cliche, but you opened my eyes to seeing them in an entirely different way. thank you, and your poem is great;)

mickey123 said...
on Feb. 13 2009 at 3:33 pm
i really luved this poem it getz me i get it dont give up on ur excelent writing keep it up u do a great job wit poetry

on Feb. 11 2009 at 7:22 pm
that was really interesting... I couldn't stop reading it untill I was completely finished.

on Jan. 24 2009 at 2:52 pm
this is awesome, i love cliches !

xxJustxxme said...
on Jan. 10 2009 at 9:35 pm
i thought it was a cliche before reading your poem. But now I think your totally right. I love the way you put this. it's a great poem =D