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Revived

January 29, 2009
By Nathaniel PLATINUM, Huntsville, Missouri
Nathaniel PLATINUM, Huntsville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"For there is nothing either good or bad, but thinking makes it so." --William Shakespeare


The grains
of my
soul
cry out
in
astonishment.

The grains
are hardened
by
tears of
relief,
and become
lumps
of happiness.

Your tears
hath
done this
wonderful
deed.

My eyes
are
opened;
I see
once more.

I am
revived,
ready to
live
once more.

I am
alive,
ready to
be
someone,
once more.

Though I
am
alive,
I cannot
move;
I lack
power.

Your lips
touch
my own,
through this'
surprising?
awe-striking?
humbling?'
contact,
you breath
electricity
into me.

Your'
life restoring?
warming?
thawing?'
breath jolts
me full
of
energy.

My limbs,
I
can move
them
again.

'Rise!'
You command
to
me, I
do your
bidding,
for I
have
no choice.

I wobble
a
little bit,
but
I eventually
stand firm:
I am
a
strong
unbreakable
pillar.

'What are you!'
You cry
to me.

'I am you vessel,'
I
answer back
to
you,
'I am revived,
I live
once more,
to carry out
the
deeds
of the
master.'


The author's comments:
Sort of reminds me of Frankenstien.

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on Jun. 25 2009 at 4:53 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This is very good. I really like how each stanza answers the other. It is all so great! Excellent job!

on Mar. 13 2009 at 4:10 pm
Nathaniel PLATINUM, Huntsville, Missouri
36 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For there is nothing either good or bad, but thinking makes it so." --William Shakespeare

Seems like the dashes trnsferred into quotation marks....interesting.

on Feb. 13 2009 at 2:45 pm
UNIQUE. LOVE REVIVES THE HARDENED, LOST SOUL. NEEDS THE TYPOS FIXED. OTHERWISE, VERY GOOOD!