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I wish

February 21, 2009
By KaylaAnne GOLD, North Platte, Nebraska
KaylaAnne GOLD, North Platte, Nebraska
16 articles 0 photos 42 comments

I wish that when I turn around I would your smile
I wish that when I close my eyes I would see you skin
I wish that the sky had your eyes
I wish that the sun had your lips
I wish that the wind spoke your words
I wish that the air had your sent
I wish that I was lucky enough to have you

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KaylaAnne GOLD said...
on Oct. 21 2009 at 3:10 pm
KaylaAnne GOLD, North Platte, Nebraska
16 articles 0 photos 42 comments
Thank you very much. Feel free to check out my other work. : )

on Apr. 23 2009 at 4:18 pm
Kristen Whalen SILVER, Shawnee, Kansas
8 articles 0 photos 3 comments
I've read all of your work and its the same style. Each line in Death begins with death, this begins with I wish. And your Room one was repetitive. I think you have great potential if you tried a different style

on Apr. 5 2009 at 12:56 pm
rootbeerfloat92 GOLD, Fort Meade, Maryland
12 articles 1 photo 8 comments
I like how you are wishing to find parts of the person in things you see every day. It feels like you want to be surrounded by them when that isn't possible. Though the first two lines had a small error, I like it =)

on Mar. 30 2009 at 5:12 pm
YeseniaG SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
7 articles 1 photo 122 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is what happens when you're busy making plans.

i dont really understand some of it...are the missnig wheres missing on purpose? i guess i just don't really comprehend the train of thought. the concept is great; i love it, but the execution comes a bit short.

edye p said...
on Mar. 30 2009 at 3:39 am
this piece is very powerful-- the repition in the beginning of each line is, for the most part, responsible for this. keep writing, you are very talanted.