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Demon of Death

April 1, 2009
By EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 258 comments

A shudder ran through the trees. The wind howled a peculiar howl
as the moon slinked above. A shadow crept through the streets,
extinguishing light from the world.

It swept through the grass, its dark, red eyes searching for a new prey,
Viciously had it devoured the first, ignoring screams of pain and agony.
The maker of ruin, it destroys lives of all, choosing
who shall survive, and who shall fall.

I knew it was my turn, all others having been struck. I waited uneasily
for what I was sure would come.
Yet better me than any other; I won't suffer of longing. I won't miss and cry,
wallowing in tears of disbelief.

No, it was better this way. Up the porch it came, the steps cracking
under its foot. Up the steps, that creature came, and moans from the bottom
I heard. Alas, thought I, for surely another had heard.

A door creaked open. And I saw the eyes, so deep and menacing that
I froze with fright. And as it came upon me, I recognized it for what it was;
I had looked into the eyes of the demon of death.

The author's comments:
Hey! I'm Edyt, and I love reading, writing, and public speaking or debating. I greatly admire the poet Edgar Allan Poe, and I strive to emulate his style when I write poetry. My favorite band is Green Day, and I can't wait for their new album! :D

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This article has 30 comments.

EdytD SILVER said...
on Sep. 7 2009 at 8:44 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 258 comments
Thanks! That really means a lot, especially b/c I admire Poe so much.

on Sep. 7 2009 at 7:07 pm
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
53 articles 29 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."

This poem is incredible! You have captured the essence of E.A.P perfectly. Had I been told this was one of Poe's own, I may have believed it! ("The maker of ruin, it destroys lives of all, choosing

who shall survive, and who shall fall." I especially enjoyed that line.)

EdytD SILVER said...
on Sep. 2 2009 at 6:27 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 258 comments
Thanks! I definitely will.

EdytD SILVER said...
on Sep. 2 2009 at 6:25 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 258 comments
I see what you mean - this is definitely different than my other poems. But I do think this is my style. I actually originally wrote this as prose, so that might be why it sounds different, but it is very similar to my prose style.

However, it is definitely different, and it is actually not my favorite, either.

DoLL_F@C3 said...
on Sep. 2 2009 at 6:02 pm
DoLL_F@C3, Memphis, Tennessee
0 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:

this is good, keep up the good work

Ruthey GOLD said...
on Aug. 31 2009 at 5:18 pm
Ruthey GOLD, West Midlands, Other
16 articles 0 photos 19 comments
i don't like this nearly as much as your other ones.

i think you're sticking too much to an archaic style, with the rhyme and language, and you don't fill it out naturally.

i think i can't really hear your voice in this, i feel as though i can only hear you being restricted and trying to fit into someone else's mould.

basically, i think it's great that you've experimented with different styles, but this just isn't you.

let your real voice out!

on Aug. 27 2009 at 1:15 am
poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
16 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you know you're in love because you can't fall asleep, because reality is finally better than your dreams"

I love reading your poetry it is simply amazing!!!!! it really makes me think, and i really like it !!!

EdytD SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 11:02 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 258 comments
Thank you so much for the comments; they mean so much to me! And Jofin J and Elana F, I'd love to take a look at your poetry, but for some reason, I can't click your names. If any of you guys don't have a username, just post a link to your work, and I'd love to check it out! Thanks!

Jennax3 SILVER said...
on Aug. 19 2009 at 5:06 am
Jennax3 SILVER, Palos Verdes Estates, California
6 articles 0 photos 113 comments
Such vivid descriptions make for a lovely poem, in my eyes. You've managed to do just that. Awesome work ;]

on Jun. 3 2009 at 4:16 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Wow! I love this one! I see how much you love Mr.Poe's work. It comes out in this piece. An eerie feeling I mean. Very good! I wish I could give you constructive criticism, haha, but unfortunately I can't. That's a good thing. :)

on Jun. 1 2009 at 2:22 am
soccerpsycho49 PLATINUM, Teaneck, New Jersey
37 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
Those who say that sunshine is happiness have never danced in the rain.

yeah i also luv edgar allen po. this was rlly good btw. and also i also write bout death and stuff (i actualy have a poem similar to this but its pending still) chek out my poetry and u can see it!

on May. 29 2009 at 4:35 pm
jofin john BRONZE, Carrollton Tx, Texas
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments
Wow that was nice I gave you a 5 out of 5

Wolfy DIAMOND said...
on May. 26 2009 at 2:42 pm
Wolfy DIAMOND, Huntsville, Alabama
71 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
A room without a book is like a body without a soul.

I agree. You have got to keep writing dude! I know a great writer when I see one. You are awesome!

Dude, it would be cool if you could look at my other poems and stories. Please do! See ya!

EdytD SILVER said...
on May. 22 2009 at 1:55 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 258 comments
thanks! i wrote this a while ago, so i don't think i'd be able to pull off adding to it - i'm not really sure what i would have written, and i just don't really know how to follow it. (Have you ever, for example, lost a piece of writing, and when you try to recreate it the piece just doesn't sound right?)

Thanks guys for all your comments. they mean so much to me! :D

on May. 19 2009 at 12:32 am SILVER, Scottsville, Kentucky
5 articles 0 photos 16 comments
wow. i love this. great imagery and it's twisted but in a nice way.

Mikal SILVER said...
on May. 15 2009 at 6:56 am
Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
6 articles 0 photos 41 comments
Hey guys check out my new poem:A letter to love.

on May. 14 2009 at 8:18 pm
banana PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
30 articles 0 photos 18 comments
so... here's that crazy banana! Yeah, this is really good! Very suspenseful... so suspenseful I wanted to read more! You should add to it!

on May. 13 2009 at 12:42 am
Love_Kills_the_Blind PLATINUM, Fort Collins, Colorado
23 articles 5 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never regret anything, at one point its exactly what you wanted."

this was incredably gripping!!! i wil read the rest of your work! We have alot in common as far as inspiration goes. Edgar Allan Poe is one of my favorite poets! By the way thanks for the comment on my work.

on May. 11 2009 at 12:05 am
SagaLiSela PLATINUM, Boonsboro, Maryland
27 articles 27 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love you."

Simple as that.

Or not that simple.


You have perfected imagery with this poem and it's so suspencesful! This is truly amazing.

Also thanks for all the comments on my photos!

on Apr. 30 2009 at 2:42 am
KICK3593 PLATINUM, Roslyn Heights, New York
49 articles 0 photos 74 comments
Disturbing and triumphant in its own tragic independence. You twist the arms of many with this winding twister of fate.