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What if I Fall

September 8, 2009
By arElana PLATINUM, Fair Lawn, New Jersey
arElana PLATINUM, Fair Lawn, New Jersey
24 articles 0 photos 94 comments

What if I fall
Down from this cliff
Looking below
Only clouds block the abyss below

What if I fall
Will they catch me
I’d smile in pleasure
Fluffy white comfort all around me

What if I fall
And the clouds reject me
What is down there far below

What if I fall...

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_Mags_ SILVER said...
on Jun. 23 2010 at 2:46 pm
_Mags_ SILVER, Somewhere, North Carolina
9 articles 7 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
- I stare danger in the face and giggle
- Never argue with an idiot, people might not know the difference
-R.A.P (Retards Attempting Poetry)
-Tip Cologne ryhmes with alone

wow is all i can say. i rated it 5/5

ZbHolland GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2010 at 9:38 pm
ZbHolland GOLD, Knoxville, Tennessee
16 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never forget the haunting past, for all you know came from it

OW!!! I love it hun!!! And i was always told that if you get the urge to write, write!!!! books, poems, stories, notes, diaries, journals, everything is in mind to write, i myself got the urge last year to start a book, i write on it every time i get the itch to, i have got 98 pages so far, but i write at least 5 or 6 poems a day, i havent posted but a few on here!!!! 5/5, keep going!!

on Jan. 29 2010 at 4:35 am
Katherine93 GOLD, Liverpool, Other
15 articles 0 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"the only person you are destined to become is the person that you choose to be" - unknown

how old are you in fth grade. is that like our year 5? not sure coz that would make you 9 or 10 ? anyways... this is fab, i love the clouds rejecting part. i totally understand this, lol. complete fear of rejectment. hahaha

Shannon_ GOLD said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 4:17 pm
Shannon_ GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
12 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
For we are the children of The Lost Generation and Truth is blind.

Really good but i would take off "below" on the 4th line... i like it 4/5

on Jan. 20 2010 at 8:07 pm
alwayssunshine PLATINUM, Charlotte, North Carolina
24 articles 5 photos 147 comments
Nice poem! I've read most of yours, and they're all deep!

P.S. I think we have the same first name! Elana?

on Jan. 18 2010 at 10:34 pm
SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
10 articles 0 photos 297 comments
Beautiful poem! My favourite line was "What if I fall/ And the clouds reject me" haha :D i found it quite cute

on Dec. 15 2009 at 6:58 pm
rubielovee BRONZE, El Paso, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1 comment
i like it good job.???

peach<3 GOLD said...
on Nov. 1 2009 at 12:24 am
peach<3 GOLD, Portland, Oregon
15 articles 7 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Growing old is mandatory, growing up is optional."

- Unknown author.

5th grade is still pretty cool!!! I'm a freshman, and I still can't write very well sometimes! Great job!

on Oct. 31 2009 at 11:14 am
Lisette-Midnight SILVER, New York, New York
7 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live for the moment you can't put in words.

Wow this is great keep on writing

on Oct. 24 2009 at 3:15 pm
arElana PLATINUM, Fair Lawn, New Jersey
24 articles 0 photos 94 comments
thanks. well i dont remember; it might have been fifth grade.

on Oct. 24 2009 at 10:20 am
Annabelle7614, Nunyabusiness, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
This is my favorite personal quote.

Duuuude fourth grade? I was writing about starfish back then, and I stunk at it! This has symbolism and flow and stuff! Awesome!

on Oct. 22 2009 at 5:18 pm
arElana PLATINUM, Fair Lawn, New Jersey
24 articles 0 photos 94 comments
thanks. i actually wrote this in fourth grade, so ive goten better since then

LaylaViolet said...
on Oct. 22 2009 at 9:48 am
I liked this one the best!!! Sometimes I feel like I'm going to fall any minute, and this somes up those feelings perfectly. I would suggest that 'below' be taken out after 'abyss' (I know, I hate it when you can't change something once it's posted). Anyhoo, I'll make THIS one my favorite. Nice work! :P