I HATE YOU!!! | Teen Ink


September 28, 2009
By BrooklynnBlue BRONZE, Simi Valley, California
BrooklynnBlue BRONZE, Simi Valley, California
3 articles 0 photos 10 comments

I hate the way you look at me
I hate the way you dress

I hate the way your hair looks
I hate it when you say my name
I hate it when you play your silly game

I hadn't had a chance to say, the way I really feel
I hated the way you broke my heart.....

But I mostly hated that you did it through a text

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on Sep. 12 2011 at 11:23 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

I kinda feel that way too. firstly, it's kinda obvious, not completely original. and secondly, the lines don't somehow sound right together - it's choppy, yes. it sounds like you just wrote it in a hurry, but you did feel it when you wrote it.

on Jun. 26 2011 at 12:35 am
swcricket98 GOLD, Williamson, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Pain is inevitable. Suffering is optional.

Honestly, I don't really agree with the other comments :/ I feel as if it's too choppy. I understand that it's free verse, and you were pouring your heart into it, but it's sorta typical.


on May. 22 2011 at 6:14 pm
Stpaulian BRONZE, Kewadin, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Bad Spellers of the world 'untie'.

I like they way you ended it. Its contagous and you mad at any guy who would be such a coward. 

on Dec. 15 2010 at 4:39 pm
niiice. totally luv the fire feeling in that wickd poem! lol yes itt sux when guys do that 2 ya. but ya gotta grit ur teeth n make em feel bad when they see you can handle on ur own. haha cuz frm experience itt works. lmao!

on Jul. 30 2010 at 11:20 am
forgottenangel SILVER, Dearborn, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Silence is Golden"

I love this poem so much. you never know how it feels unless you've experienced it yourself.

on Feb. 19 2010 at 4:22 pm
Kristy_loves_Keats PLATINUM, Arvada, Colorado
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you would like my poems if you like this one. and btw this is an AMAZING poem great job

Jordyn:) said...
on Dec. 27 2009 at 10:57 pm
Jordyn:), Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"You save yourself or you remain unsaved." -Alice Sebold, author of The Lovely Bones and Lucky

So real, because so many girls can relate to that type of coward who has done that to them.

Brooke M. said...
on Oct. 11 2009 at 5:16 pm
hi! that was a really good poem

very good imagery

nice emotion keep it up!

on Oct. 11 2009 at 2:28 pm
Skinnyjeankidd BRONZE, St.louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:

wow this is sooo live i hate that

on Oct. 11 2009 at 11:48 am
SilverAngel SILVER, West Carollton, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is an open book, we take the journey until the end." ~Me

I Love the entire poem, but the ending is by far the best part!

on Oct. 11 2009 at 10:44 am
FlamableFyre DIAMOND, Spartanburg, South Carolina
93 articles 9 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't have ambitions or desires.
Being a poet isn't my ambition,
it's my way of being alone.
~ Fernando Pessoa ~

wow, so concise byt simple. i loved it and i know how you feel, if this really did happen, keep up the good work, great job!

on Oct. 11 2009 at 1:37 am
aRunningTourist BRONZE, Pomona, California
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OMG! that was amazing. i absolutely love it when someone pours out their heart like that. i can totally relate to that. and im sorry that it happened. but with that negative came out two positives. a better eye for the future and an amazing poem. Good job.

on Oct. 10 2009 at 11:23 pm
choirchic101 SILVER, Norwalk, California
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Favorite Quote:
in order for God to use all of you you have to be completely broken

that was amazing. the emotion in it is really good. it relates so well to teenage girls that have had a boyfriend break up with them through text. it was really good. keep up the good work

on Oct. 10 2009 at 6:08 pm
blingblang4eva ELITE, Fayetteville, Georgia
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a good breakup emotion.a good way to recover from a breakup is poetry. so very good idea.

on Oct. 10 2009 at 5:33 pm
Mylifeforpoetry BRONZE, Burlingame, California
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Favorite Quote:
" Learning how to fly is jumping and missing the ground"

I like your poem, that's all i have to say

Ali.B GOLD said...
on Oct. 10 2009 at 7:10 am
Ali.B GOLD, Lexington, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
I write whatever flows from my fingers- AJY

i like this. it sound like you need to kick somebodies but. keep writing.

isaac said...
on Oct. 9 2009 at 2:07 pm
i feel your pain

terez said...
on Oct. 9 2009 at 2:06 pm
yea what j-rod said

me123 said...
on Oct. 9 2009 at 2:05 pm
woooooooooooow snap

Juan Miguel said...
on Oct. 9 2009 at 2:01 pm
8 out of 10