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Untitled(help me think of one?)

January 28, 2010
By X_Dysfuntional_Lyrics_X GOLD, Cleveland, Ohio
X_Dysfuntional_Lyrics_X GOLD, Cleveland, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
I have a lot of favorite quotes. I cant really pick.


Sitting in the shower letting the steaming hot water splash onto my skin
I watch as the steam collects outside the shower
I watch as it obsorbs all my pain, feelings and problems
I watch as it fogs up the mirror; covering up the hideous being inside me
I cant breath; the hot water and steam make it hard
I dont move
I sit there like a statue
I can hear the water rushing out of the showerhead
But I pay no attetion to it
The hot water has made my body numb
So now I barely feel it
That is until it turns ice cold
It jolts me back to reality
Throws everything back at me
Oh how the water has betrayed me
The ice cold water seeps through me and chills my bones
Still I sit there in a daze
Then finally realize that I must get out
That I must face reality and its cold embrace
Oh how I wish I could make the water hot again
And watch the steam take everything away once again


The author's comments:
I thought of this while I was sitting in my shower..yes I was sitting in my shower..This is what I felt and thought..I havent had the best few days :( please tell me if its any good or whatever.

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on Sep. 14 2010 at 5:24 pm
Kingfan123 GOLD, Charles Town, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Life moves pretty fast, if you don't stop to look around once in awhile, you could miss it."
and
"I'd rather stand alone for the right reasons than stand popular for the wrong."

Wow. Great imagery! Really, I reallt felt like a was sitting in the shower. I like how you write poems, it takes you away in a way that no other poet does. For me, anyway. But hmm, a tite...maybe Hot and Cold? I don't know. But that poem was very good! :-)

on Mar. 1 2010 at 6:10 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

i like how you used something other than your thoughts to explain something. :) this was verygood. though i don't think i can think of a title for you either. sorry :/ anyways, i thought this was very good. :)