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the dad i have to live with

January 30, 2010
By hollyhottell DIAMOND, Redding, California
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hollyhottell DIAMOND, Redding, California
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poetry is a diary written out loud

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life has been hard
the pain has been great
i waited for you
but you came to late
ive waited for years
for you to rescue me
but you left me in tears
you gave me up so easily
the others dont care
i took it to heart
they dont think i should share
my words are to harsh for your heart
my words wernt always mean
i loved you uncondisionally
i was always on your team
when we acted like a family
now my pain has gone bitter
and you dont understand
actions spaek louder than words
is that such a big demand

© Shana G., Cross Plains, WI

The author's comments:
i have many feelings toward my dad and i have a brother and sister that can just keep forgiving him no matter what he does. i love my father verry much but i treat him with respect and get none back. if he wont change when i let him know i love him then maby he will change when i show him the tough love that he shows me.
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hollyhottell DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 7 2010 at 10:10 am
hollyhottell DIAMOND, Redding, California
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poetry is a diary written out loud

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thank you alot. yes i am a really bad speller. i'll try to work on it
awesomeaugust GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2010 at 8:03 pm
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
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&quot;Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground&quot;<br /> ~Theordore Roosevelt

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I'm sorry about your relationship with your father. I thought this was an excellent poem. I don't know a lot about lyrics, but I can imagine this poem more as song lyrics to a rap or something. The only poinbt of critism I have is that it would improve the poem a lot if you just ran a spell check- if you have time to write such a great poem, you have time to correct a few spelling errors :)
CaptainFabulous. GOLD said...
on Feb. 14 2010 at 6:03 pm
CaptainFabulous. GOLD, Union, Missouri
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PERSONAL FAVORITE QUOTE::::<br /> <br /> &quot;When life hands you lemons,make BEEF STEW!&quot;<br /> -Andy Milanokis?(sp)

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i used to think the same thing towards my mother

i waited years for her

now i just dont care anymore

great poem

good job

:P