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Someday

February 6, 2010
By thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
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I painted a picture with my tears.
It was a picture of dark clouds, rain, and thunder.
It was a picture of an ocean that had been created by the tears, sorrows, and pains of humanity.
It was a picture of my own river of life’s little torments.
My river contributed to the mighty sea, as its beaches were continually being swallowed by new troubles added to the ocean of tears.
But soon my river, which has flooded over, will turn into an insignificant stream.
But for now, I wallow in my torturous condition hoping that someday my river can turn into a stream.
Someday, someday, someday…



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on Feb. 17 2012 at 1:08 pm
RedFeather GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Prose is like walking but poetry is like dancing.
—Paul Valery, poet (1871 - 1945)

Great poem. It's kinds dark, but hopeful at the same time. Btw, could you cheack out some of my other poems, or at least MoonBeams and tell me what you think? Someone's opinion on those would be much appriciated.

on Jun. 14 2010 at 11:31 am
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
46 articles 0 photos 231 comments
Thanks again for reading my stuff and commenting!  It's really nice to look at My Work and see the numbers of people who have read, commented, and rated my work.  Thank You!

on Jun. 7 2010 at 4:46 pm
roxymutt BRONZE, Marietta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see. -David Henry Thoreau

this is quite good!!! i cant write poetry much haha im more fiction but for some reason i decided to read some randoms on the poetry side and im glad i stumbled upon yours! it flows nicely and the details paint a picture! :)

on May. 30 2010 at 10:41 am
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
46 articles 0 photos 231 comments
thanks for reading my stuff, i've submitted more poems, but they haven't been accepted yet, they should be out in a couple of days (i hope)

on May. 23 2010 at 7:01 pm
sunnyhunny PLATINUM, Litchfield, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind."
-Ghandi

Again, great metaphor!  I really like your work, and can relate to your poems.